Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

in modern age, people now overeally on mobile phone and advanced PC, as they can watch online everykind of movie, series, local drama's and live shows at home. As there are some people who says that, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all kind of entertainment online everywhere. But some people argue that theatres and cinemas are still beneficial and important for both economically and culturally.

Nowadays there is alot of advanced tecnology extists, like smart and small projecters came in markets, as you fit it every where at your home and enjoy all kind entertainment. in some countries people went to watch movies and shows at cinemas and theatres as there is crises of electricity, millions of electricity units are wasting in that places, they can watch it online also in which government can save electricity.

on they other hand, people think that it is important for economy and culture, for intance, when you are buying tickets for a movie or shows it's effects on countries economy . for many people watching anykind of movie or something in cinema or theatre are cultre that is also way people argue it.

to put it all in one paragraph or in conclusion, i think watching any kind of entertainment in movie theatres or cinema are economically nagetive point for their state as they people are wasting fuel in there bikes or cars, wasting of electricity and alot thing. that is some people argue that people should entertainment

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You introduce both views and give a clear preference against theatres and cinemas, mentioning electricity use and travel fuel as reasons. However, the discussion is only minimally developed: the economic and cultural case is reduced to ticket purchases and the claim that cinema-going is a cultural activity, without explaining its wider value or giving a specific example. Your own argument also needs clearer support and a more complete conclusion; the final phrase, “people should entertainment,” leaves the point unfinished. The response is 239 words, so it does not meet the 250-word minimum; 12 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each side with relevant explanation and examples, and finish with a complete, direct statement of your opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting reasons for online viewing, a paragraph beginning “on they other hand,” and a concluding paragraph. This helps the reader identify the two positions. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and some links are unclear or mechanical. For example, “in some countries” introduces the electricity point without explaining its connection to the previous discussion of home projectors. The phrase “to put it all in one paragraph or in conclusion” is confusing, and the final sentence breaks off, weakening the ending. Use one clear purpose per paragraph, connect each reason to the main claim, and use straightforward transitions and references so the argument develops step by step.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “projecters,” “tickets,” “economy,” “culture,” and “electricity,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice problems that make several ideas difficult to interpret. Examples include “overeally,” “everykind,” “crises of electricity,” “cultre,” and “nagetive point.” Phrases such as “wasting fuel in there bikes or cars” and “people should entertainment” are not expressed naturally or precisely. Build a more accurate set of topic phrases, such as “attend a live performance,” “support local employment,” and “preserve cultural traditions,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “as” and “when,” but control is inconsistent and errors often make the intended relationships unclear. For example, “there are some people who says” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “when you are buying tickets … it's effects” has an unclear clause structure and incorrect pronoun form. The sentence beginning “as you fit it every where” is also incomplete in its relationship to the preceding idea, and the final clause, “people should entertainment,” is unfinished. Work on complete sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and consistent clause construction. Aim first for accurate, clear sentences, then add more varied complex structures.

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