Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the digital age,cinemas and theaters are less important because now a days peple can watch all the entertainment they want online while the others argue that these places still plays an important role both economically and culturally.

Now a days, due to advance technology alot of people watch movies online but we cant say that cinemas dont have importance when a person gets fed up from his hectic routine he make plan to go out and spend leisure time with family or friends than they out and watch films in theaters and cinemas.

economically,cinmeas are impotant now a days because cinemas provide jobs and genearand give opportunity to people and grow

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two broad positions: online entertainment is convenient, while cinemas may remain valuable for leisure and employment. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: the online view is mentioned but not explained, the economic point is unfinished, and the cultural importance is not discussed. Your own opinion is also not clearly stated. The example of going out with family or friends is relevant, but it needs explanation and support. The response contains 104 words, so it is 146 words below the 250-word minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop both views, state your position, and add specific reasons or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the debate, followed by a paragraph about online viewing and cinema visits, then a paragraph beginning with the economic argument. This gives the reader some sense of direction. However, the ideas are not arranged into a complete, coherent discussion: the final paragraph stops mid-thought, and there is no conclusion or clear progression to an opinion. Connections between points are also unclear, particularly in the long sentence beginning “when a person gets fed up.” Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and connect each reason to an explanation or example. Clear sentence boundaries and a concluding paragraph would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “digital age,” “technology,” “leisure time,” “economically,” and “culturally,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “peple,” “cinmeas,” “genearand,” and “alot.” Some expressions are also imprecise: “these places still plays an important role” does not clearly specify the cultural or social value, while “give opportunity to people and grow” is incomplete and unclear. Aim for accurate, specific phrases such as “provide employment,” “support local businesses,” and “shared cultural experiences.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise collocations would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and a longer sentence with a time clause, as in “when a person gets fed up from his hectic routine he make plan to go out.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “these places still plays” and “he make,” missing articles in “make plan” and “spend leisure time,” and the run-on structure in the sentence about going out and watching films. Punctuation is also weak, with missing spaces after commas and no clear sentence boundary in places. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using correctly punctuated clauses.

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