Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

First we discuss online entertainment as we know tha in today social media era it is true that all types of national and international movies,drames songs and other entertaining material available on mobies and laptops and many people enjoye by saving money and time but there are some who want to experience theatres and cinemas and excited to watch theartres drames andd films in cinemas.so we can not say that entertainment is completely digitlized.

morever people buy tickets for the entertainment that take place in theartres and cinemas.the amount that the owners recieved from the tickets will be paid to government in the form of taxes so eventially theartres and cinemas contribute to the economy of country.many theartres drames and shows are based on our culture which educate us about culture and it increase our curisty about our socialism and culture values. in theartres we see character to our own eyes we believe easily in nowadays where videos in social media we suspected that the video is real of fake may be it is AI video so it is difficult to understand.so through theartres we can grow our culture.

in recent days a polpular movie is release so we friends decided that we will go the cinema to watch the movie because it have different experience watching movie in cinema but when we

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both sides of the discussion: online viewing is presented as convenient and economical, while cinemas and theatres are linked to ticket income, taxes, and cultural experiences. Your example of friends choosing to see a popular film also supports the value of the cinema experience. However, the response does not clearly state your own overall opinion, and the cultural and economic points are asserted rather than explained with specific examples. The final sentence is unfinished, so the example and argument are left incomplete. The response is also 27 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop the discussion. To strengthen the response, state your position directly and explain each main point with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to move from online entertainment to the continuing economic and cultural role of venues, and phrases such as “morever” and “so” signal some relationships between ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, making the two views and your own position difficult to distinguish. Connections are often repetitive or unclear, and the final sentence stops mid-thought (“but when we”), disrupting the progression. Organise the essay into an introduction, separate paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion. Use linking expressions to show contrast and cause more precisely, and ensure each paragraph develops one central idea before moving to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “tickets,” “taxes,” “economy,” “culture,” and “experience,” so the reader can identify the main subject. However, the range is basic and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “theatres and cinemas” and “culture.” Frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices sometimes strain understanding, as in “mobies,” “drames,” “curisty,” and “socialism” where the context appears to call for “social values.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “grow our culture.” Build a more accurate range of topic language and check spelling carefully. More precise alternatives for discussing convenience, cultural preservation, and the shared experience of viewing would make the argument clearer and more academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining that ticket revenue is paid to the government as tax, and you use some simple sentence patterns that communicate the general topic. However, control is inconsistent: errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur throughout. Examples include “all types … material available,” “the amount … will be paid,” and “it increase our curiosity.” The opening sentence is especially difficult to follow because several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “while,” or “although.” Check subject–verb agreement and complete every sentence.

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