Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent years, cinemas and theatres are widely discussed. While the some people believe that people did not prefer cinemas or theatres because they get entertainment through online. Others argues that cinemas and theatres both are crucial today. This essay will give both views and i also agree from both topic because both are crucial. Moreover, cinemas and theatres was very famous in past yet now the online system become very crucial and become very famous.

In subsequent perspective, cinemas and theatres are no longer important for some peoples because they want to relax their self at home. Furthermore, mostly people think that cinemas is a waste of time and human face a lot of trouble during cinemas. Watching movies on online become very famous today. Today generation did not want to waste their time. people think we saw movies without crowd and without any trouble at home. Watching movies at home provide entertainment at home and online system is very les time consuming.

On the one hand, it is often argued that people prefer to go cinemas and theatres because they want to spend their separate time with friends and siblings. Moreover, people saw movies in cinemas with having snacks and capture memories together. Cinemas and theatres was very peaceful places where people watches movies and become happy or got entertainment.

On the other hand, both perspective have their own value but today cinemas and theatres got low level importance. People saw movies at home without time waste.

In the subsequent conclusion, cinemas and theatres are valuable yet online system is more crucial today people watch movies any time of the day.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You introduce both views and give a general preference for online entertainment in the conclusion, so the response is relevant to the topic. However, the position is not consistently clear: the introduction says you agree that “both are crucial,” while the conclusion says online viewing is “more crucial.” The two sides are also only partly addressed. You explain convenience at home, but the economic and cultural importance of cinemas and theatres in the prompt is not discussed. The points about spending time with friends and making memories are relevant, yet they need explanation or a specific example to show why these venues remain important. State one clear position and develop each view with more precise supporting reasons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can identify the broad contrast between home viewing and attending venues. However, progression is uneven: the paragraph beginning “On the one hand” presents the case for cinemas, but the next paragraph repeats that they have “low level importance” without clearly connecting this point to the earlier argument. Several linking phrases, including “In subsequent perspective” and “In the subsequent conclusion,” sound mechanical or do not accurately signal the relationship between ideas. Repeated references to “people” and “cinemas and theatres” also make the flow repetitive. Organise the essay into two clearly developed viewpoints, then use a conclusion that follows directly from your stated position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, such as “entertainment,” “online system,” “crowd,” and “memories,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, particularly “very famous,” “crucial,” and “people saw movies.” Some word combinations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “relax their self,” “separate time,” and “low level importance,” and these sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Aim for more precise expressions for convenience, social experiences and cultural value, and vary repeated words. For example, describe online viewing as “convenient” and a cinema visit as a “shared social experience,” rather than relying on general claims about fame or importance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a contrast introduced by “While” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction. Examples include “Others argues,” “cinemas and theatres was,” and “people watches”; these should use matching plural forms. The opening phrase “While the some people believe” also has an unnecessary article and creates an awkward sentence structure. Tense shifts such as “people did not prefer” and “people saw movies” are not suitable for general present-day claims. Practise building accurate present-tense sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “although,” “because” and “whereas.”

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