Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
People hold different views regarding digital age. Many people think that theatres and cinemas are no longer essential part of persons life for the entertainment while, other argue that theatres and cinemas are still important for both economically and culturally.
On the one hand, there are several benefits that are available to watch the movie or any match in the theatres and cinemas. Firstly, those people who are trouble in their actual life watch movie in the theatres feel fress and reduce the anxiety and stess level. Secondly, some youngsters goes to the cinema with whole family membersand enjoy their whole journey. Thirdly, individuals that are are tro
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response begins to address the topic by mentioning the view that cinemas offer relaxation and family enjoyment, but it does not discuss both sides of the question. The economic and cultural importance of theatres and cinemas is not explained, and the opposing view—that online entertainment can replace them—is also absent. No clear personal opinion is given, and the examples are only briefly introduced rather than developed. The response is also incomplete and contains 100 words, which is 150 words below the required minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt were excluded from that count. To improve, present both viewpoints, state your own position clearly, and support each main idea with explanation or a relevant example.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introductory paragraph is followed by a paragraph beginning “On the one hand,” and ideas are signposted with “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Thirdly.” These markers show an intended sequence, but the discussion does not progress into a complete argument. The paragraph ends abruptly at “individuals that are are tro,” leaving the final point unfinished, and there is no contrasting paragraph or conclusion. Some connections between ideas are also unclear, such as how family cinema visits support the importance of theatres. Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and complete each point with an explanation so the reader can follow the argument.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses a small range of topic-related vocabulary, including “digital age,” “entertainment,” “anxiety,” and “cinema,” and attempts to signal ideas with “essential” and “economically and culturally.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which can make meaning difficult to follow: “trouble in their actual life,” “feel fress,” and “reduce the anxiety and stess level.” Spelling errors such as “stess” and “fress,” along with the unfinished phrase “individuals that are are tro,” further reduce clarity. Build a more precise vocabulary for comparing online viewing with shared cinema experiences, and check spelling and natural word combinations before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts some sentence variety, including a relative clause in “those people who are trouble in their actual life” and a sequence of sentences introduced by “Firstly” and “Secondly.” However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent. Examples include “Many people think that theatres and cinemas are no longer essential part,” where an article is missing, and “some youngsters goes,” where the subject and verb do not agree. The opening sentence also has an unclear contrast structure, and the final clause is incomplete. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to understand. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence construction, then use longer structures only when you can control them.
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