Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the essay we discuss about the thinking of different people some people says theatres and cinemas are important for digital age and important for the growth of economically and culturally. But some people think it is no longer important because everything are available online at the time every work of the world are do online. In the digital age every child see everythink on the different devices because everything available online so easily see in our home and save our essential time of our life.

On the one hand, those people think theathres and cinemas are no longer important in my opinion it thought is better than other people because at the modern era, everything are available online on different websites. At the time tecnology change our life so we can easily see the movies and listen music online . Only few minute the peole search on the internet then everything available on the screen after choose it and see it. We entertainment every emotion in our home and we save our essential time of our life. We entertainment in our home with our family. Most new website are available which anything reveal on the internet he reach late into cinemas and we see it early online.

On the other hand, those peole say that theathers and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally because in the theathres and cinemas take the tickets of every person and people feels he see original view in the cinemas and these people economically built our country.

In my opinion, in the digital age no more need of theathers and cinemas to watching the movie and for entertainment because everything are available on the internet and we can entertainment with our family in our home.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You present a clear opinion that online entertainment has made cinemas and theatres less necessary, and you include both sides of the discussion. The online-view paragraph gives relevant reasons, such as convenience, saving time, and watching with family at home. However, the opposing view is only briefly mentioned: ticket sales and a vague claim that cinemas help the country economically do not explain their cultural value or economic impact. Several points are repeated rather than developed, and the opening mostly restates the topic. To strengthen the response, explain how cinemas support jobs and local businesses, and give a specific example of their shared cultural experience. The response meets the task’s length requirement; nine words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The essay has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two paragraphs introduced by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a concluding opinion. These signposts help readers identify the two positions. However, progression within paragraphs is weak because several ideas repeat, particularly that online viewing is easy, saves time, and can be enjoyed at home. Some connections are unclear, as in “Most new website are available which anything reveal on the internet he reach late into cinemas.” The conclusion repeats the opinion without drawing together the discussion. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, explain it in a clear sequence, and use pronouns and linking phrases only when their references are clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic topic vocabulary such as “digital age,” “online,” “cinemas,” “tickets,” and “entertainment,” so the general subject is usually identifiable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “we entertainment every emotion” does not express a clear idea, and “these people economically built our country” is an unclear description of cinemas’ economic contribution. There are also frequent spelling and word-form problems, including “theathres,” “peole,” and “tecnology.” Build a more precise range for discussing convenience, employment, cultural experiences, and revenue, and check spelling and collocations. The suggestions below offer practical replacements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to organise ideas into sentences and use a few linking structures, including “because” and “On the other hand.” However, sentence patterns are very limited, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction sometimes obscure meaning. Examples include “some people says,” “everything are available,” and “people feels he see original view.” The opening also contains an incomplete or confusing construction: “In the essay we discuss about the thinking of different people.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas with clauses such as “because” or “although.” Check subject–verb agreement and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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