Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people think that auditorium and movie houses important sources of economically and culturally. other argue that they believe computer age, theaters and cinemas major affect on economically and culturally all the entertainment they want to watch online platform. in this essay, I will discuss both views before explaining why in my point of view cinema and theaters its important for making money and artistic.

To begin with, some people are enjoy cinemas and some people enjoy auditorium on their weekend. government generate revenue from movies houses and theaters. in the large cities have a lots of cinemas and theaters in a different area. majority people passionate about cultural activity they spend more time on its. for example in my country have a lots of festival like Diwali, and Holi in Diwali they can perform cultural story in the auditoriums many people comes to the theaters and watched and enjoy performance. government makes money.

On the other hand, people prefer to watch movies on movies house because movie house gives the better experience. For example cinemas have good quality of sound system and also the environment feel realistic.

Another key point, Some people use online platform for watch movies they believe that online platform is cheap rather than theaters and they also prefer watch movies online because whenever they can watch movies their time.

To sum up, this essay discussed both views. I believe that cinemas and theaters more important for economically and culturally

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear overall opinion that cinemas and theatres remain important, and you attempt to discuss both sides. The cultural example involving Diwali and Holi is relevant, while the point that online viewing is cheaper and more convenient represents the opposing view. However, the discussion is only partial: the economic and cultural benefits are asserted rather than explained, and the online argument receives little development. The paragraph about cinema sound and atmosphere supports the value of attending in person, but does not fully address the economic or cultural case. The response is also six words below the required minimum. Develop each view with a reason and a specific example, and make your position more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for different points, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “To sum up” help readers identify the stages of the discussion. However, progression between ideas is limited, and some points are placed together without a clear link—for example, the paragraph moves from weekend attendance to government revenue and then to festivals. The second and third body paragraphs also present related arguments about in-person and online viewing without explaining how they connect. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main claim, then develop it in a logical sequence. Clearer referencing and fewer abrupt transitions would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “revenue,” “cultural activity,” “festival,” “sound system,” and “online platform.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the economic, cultural, and technological aspects of the question. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to understand. For instance, “auditorium” is used where you mean theatres, and “important sources of economically and culturally” does not express the intended idea clearly. Repetition of “movies,” “cinemas,” and “theaters” also limits variety. Build a more precise set of topic collocations and check whether each word fits its context; this will make your ideas clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few longer structures, including “before explaining why…” and the example beginning “For example,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in sentence formation and verb forms appear throughout, as in “government generate revenue,” “many people comes,” and “they can watch movies their time.” Articles, plurals, and agreement are also inconsistent, while several sentences lack the grammatical elements needed to connect their ideas. These problems can make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because” and “although.” Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence structure.

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