Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

How I'm Jose Nicolas Carlos and now i'm gonna share my experience using the theatres,cinema and of course in the internet like computer or cellphones first i'm gonna tell about my experience in movie theatre.

before the gadgets and internets watching movies there was a movie that everyone can watch what's new in the theatre and before watching them you're gonna buy first a ticket the movie was boring if they're not partnered with some movie snacks.

inside the theatre there was a big white blank it's like a plastic pad like a huge i don't know what to call that it places infront of you they have a movie tapes and video tape devices to start and watch movie, yes i enjoyed watching movie inside of the theatre it's classic because that's the traditional way watching in theatre not only a movie you can watch on theatre yiu can also watch live dances like balerina and other ballroom dances.

now were gonna talk about the internet movies, eatching internet movies in phone, computers and many more gadgets that you can watch a movie but before you watch movie in internet they have a subscription offer like they not gonna allow you to watch movie in your gadgets without paying the subscription first the benefits of subscription that you're gonna have an access of movies in 1 month it depends on your subscription, watching internet movies are flexible you can watch while you're in the bed

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response is only minimally relevant to the question: it describes personal experiences of theatres and online films, but does not clearly discuss whether cinemas remain economically or culturally important, nor explain the opposing view that online entertainment makes them less necessary. The brief points about buying tickets, subscriptions and watching in bed could support the two sides, but they are not developed into reasons or examples that answer the prompt. There is also no clear concluding opinion, so the reader cannot identify your position. The response is four words below the required minimum, which further limits the development possible. To improve, address both views directly, explain their economic and cultural effects, and finish with a clearly supported opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into a theatre section and an internet section, and phrases such as “first” and “now” signal a change of topic. However, the ideas do not progress through a clear discussion of both views, and the response ends without a conclusion. Several sentences run together or contain unclear references, such as “the movie was boring if they're not partnered with some movie snacks” and the description of the screen and equipment. Paragraphing is limited, and the opening focuses on introducing personal experience rather than setting out the discussion. Use separate paragraphs for the online argument, the continuing value of theatres, and your opinion; connect each point with clear cause-and-effect links.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small range of relevant vocabulary, including “theatre,” “subscription,” “access,” and “flexible,” so the main topic is generally recognisable. However, wording is often repetitive or imprecise, and some expressions make ideas difficult to follow, such as “a big white blank” and “movie tapes and video tape devices.” There are also spelling and word-choice problems, including “eatching” and “yiu,” alongside repeated use of “movie” and “watch.” Build a wider set of accurate terms for the topic, such as “streaming services,” “cinema audience,” “live performance,” and “ticket revenue.” Check spelling and choose precise phrases rather than describing an object indirectly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic time and conditional forms, for example, “before you watch movie in internet they have a subscription offer.” However, sentence boundaries and grammatical control are inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors that make the relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “How I'm Jose Nicolas Carlos,” “before the gadgets and internets watching movies,” and “it places infront of you they have a movie tapes.” Verb forms, articles, plurals, and punctuation also need attention; for instance, “a movie” and “movies” are not used consistently, and several sentences begin with lowercase letters. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check articles, agreement, and punctuation.

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