Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This question raises a fundamental , thought provoking, continous and fasctaning debate about two distane views on enterainment markets in the contemproray world.I believe that both the view are equally convincing which i examine in detail below.

On, the one hand there are some people who contend the theatres and cinemas are essential for development of the society is justifiable.The main contention for this arguments is that more people now a days are interested in watching movies of their favourite actors in the theatres rather than watching in online by seating in homes, because this people enjoy watching favourit movies in big screen with comforts and snacks ,in home they dont find good sound system.as these buy tickets by paying large amounts helps the governments and production team to development and recovery of scocietys problems.The second arguments is thatpeople love enjoy and spent time with therre loved atleast once a month .According, to famous film industries in Auatralia,United states of America,and the United Kingdom.The third key factor is that finacial support plays a vital role dveloping the world.

On the, other hand their are other people who vehemently oppose perviosly mentioned views on the arguments.this people believe that online platform as a great influence on the society as many people of busy with their lifestyle they perfer to watch enterainment through online by saving communite time.so the people enjoy movies through online rather rushing around the palces.

In conclusion even though both perspectives on enteraintments markets are relevant,invaluable and compelling,It is evident that a balanced approcah is essential.By compellig insights from this arguments can help governments and people to achieve greater success.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the discussion and state a position in the introduction, saying that “both the view are equally convincing.” You also give relevant reasons, including the cinema experience and the convenience of online viewing. However, the position is not sustained clearly: the conclusion calls for a “balanced approach” without explaining how you weigh the two views. Several points are asserted rather than developed—for example, the claim that ticket purchases help governments and solve “societys problems” is unclear, and the economic and cultural importance of venues is not explained with specific support. Develop each side with a clear example, then state directly which view you find more persuasive or how the two can coexist.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. The signposts “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help distinguish the positions. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from audience preferences to government revenue, socialising, film industries, and financial support without clear links between these points. Some transitions are awkward or inaccurate, such as “According, to” and “The second arguments,” while the conclusion introduces a general idea rather than drawing together the discussion. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, explain it, and use clear references and transitions to connect supporting details.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “digital,” “online platform,” “financial support,” and “film industries,” and you use some evaluative language such as “compelling.” However, frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices make parts of the response difficult to understand, as in “fasctaning,” “distane views,” and “enterainment markets.” Several phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “watching in online,” “development and recovery of scocietys problems,” and “rushing around the palces.” These issues limit the clarity and flexibility of your vocabulary. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for discussing entertainment, audience experience, and economic or cultural effects.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a contrast introduced by “even though.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “there are some people who contend the theatres and cinemas are essential for development of the society is justifiable” combines clauses without a clear grammatical relationship. In “both the view are equally convincing,” the subject and verb do not agree, and several sentences lack clear boundaries or use commas incorrectly. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time; check agreement, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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