Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some individuals argue that in the modern era, online entertainment would change the important of theatres and cinemas because it is convienent and easy for the entertainment while others think that theatres and cinemas are still play major role from economically and culturally because old generations likes to watch movie in the theatre rather than online.

New generation people have not time to go theatre and take long time to get tickets. Online movies save time and easily watch where you comfortable. It is also preferable for those cities where have not any cinemas hall, they

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify both sides of the discussion: online viewing is convenient, while cinemas retain economic and cultural importance and appeal to older generations. However, the response addresses the task only minimally. The online-viewing point is briefly introduced, but the sentence about cities without cinemas is left unfinished (“they”), and the opposing view is not explained beyond one general claim. There is no clear personal opinion, nor are reasons supported with relevant examples. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words, leaving too little space to develop the discussion. To improve, state your position clearly, explain each view in a separate developed paragraph, and add specific examples, such as the social experience of a cinema visit or the convenience of streaming.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening sentence introduces the two views, and the next paragraph begins to explain the advantages of online entertainment. The contrast marker “while” helps signal opposing positions. However, the progression is very limited, and the second paragraph ends abruptly with “they,” so the final idea is incomplete. There is no conclusion to bring the discussion together, and the reader cannot follow a developed sequence of reasons and examples. Use a clear structure with an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion stating your opinion. Within paragraphs, connect each claim to an explanation or example using linking phrases such as “For instance” and “As a result.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “online entertainment,” “convenient,” “economically,” and “culturally,” so the main subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which makes parts of the message awkward: “change the important of theatres” and “play major role from economically and culturally” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also spelling errors such as “convienent,” and “cinemas hall” is an unsuitable form. Build a more precise range around the topic, for example “reduce the demand for cinemas,” “serve an important cultural role,” and “cinema venues.” Check spelling and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a complex opening sentence that contrasts two views using “while,” and the sentence about online viewing includes a reason and a result. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and the range of structures is limited. Examples include “theatres and cinemas are still play major role,” where the verb pattern and article are incorrect, and “old generations likes,” where subject–verb agreement is faulty. In “those cities where have not any cinemas hall,” the clause structure is incomplete, and the final sentence fragment ending in “they” prevents the idea from being completed. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete relative clauses. Use shorter, complete sentences first, then add complex structures once their grammar is secure.

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