Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The formation of rain-shadow deserts

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram demonstrate how one type of desert known as rain shadow to desert formed ,it have flow to various component and evently to ready for rain falls .

Overall , to clear that the rain water is the massive amount to stored in the sea ,Therefor to spend the duration the rain water has evaporate the heat of sun and fill in the air to push upward form on another hand fow diffierent stages such as moist air and cool to form of clouds moreover to ready the rain falls.

Initinally , to discussed comperhensively to the rain water stay at sea .In addition to commence the winds approach coast and flow the next stage is wind pushed upwards and mixed with moist air cool on the other hand to systematic cloud form and is the last one is rain falls process rain water is draind to earth and left to dry wind inland areas in rain shadow desert to thousands kilometer run into the sea .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the topic and include several relevant stages, including winds approaching the coast, rising, cloud formation, rainfall, and dry winds reaching inland. However, the process is only partially reported: the key cause-and-effect sequence is not clearly explained, and the overview is difficult to interpret. For example, the claim that rainwater evaporates from the sea “to push upward” does not accurately describe the diagram, which shows moist air being forced up over the mountains, cooling and producing rain on the windward side. The final movement of dry air over the mountain to the leeward side is also unclear. Focus on the air and wind rather than stored rainwater, and summarise the contrast between the wet windward side and the dry inland rain-shadow area.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an attempted overview, and a final paragraph describing stages, so there is some organisation. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and ideas are often joined in long, confusing strings. The overview begins “Overall, to clear that” and moves between stored sea water, evaporation, rising air, clouds, and rainfall without showing how these stages relate. Linking expressions such as “In addition,” “on the other hand,” and “moreover” are used mechanically or do not express the intended relationship. The final paragraph also repeats earlier stages rather than clearly advancing through the process. Use a simple sequence—coastal winds, uplift and rainfall, then dry air inland—and reserve connectors for relationships they accurately signal.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the diagram, including “moist air,” “clouds,” “rain falls,” and “inland areas,” which helps identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make the process difficult to follow. Phrases such as “rain water is the massive amount to stored,” “flow to various component,” and “ready for rain falls” do not convey the intended meaning naturally. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “Initinally,” “evently,” and “diffierent.” Build a reliable set of process terms and use them precisely: for example, describe air as rising, cooling, and becoming dry, rather than saying it is “ready” for rainfall.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to combine ideas into longer sentences, but these structures are often faulty, and grammatical errors frequently make relationships between stages hard to understand. For instance, “The diagram demonstrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “it have flow” uses an incorrect verb form. The overview contains incomplete or malformed constructions such as “Overall, to clear that” and “to spend the duration the rain water has evaporate.” Articles, tense, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistently controlled, as seen in “the rain water stay at sea” and the extended final paragraph. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, with a clear subject and verb, then connect them using accurate clauses such as “As the moist air rises, it cools and forms clouds.”

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