Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The formation of rain-shadow deserts

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The Environmental have unlimited stunning factors yet humans can not explore yet, on of the rain-shadow desert is also include on the list At a glance, winds comes from ocean to convert into dry winds.

The given Diagrame shows the winds comes from ocean is going upward because of the mountains by the coastline, after reaching certain height the air becomes dense and make tiny droplets is called as the moist this moist rinse and cools and make clouds the clouds cause rain at top of mountain and the air is now dry and continue to flowing downward from leeward side of mountain and this is the last stage of dry winds reach inland areas, This types of desert called as

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, the content is incomplete; the description of the process stops abruptly at the end of the second paragraph without concluding the explanation of the rain-shadow effect. While the student attempts to describe the movement of air and the formation of clouds, the lack of a clear summary of the main features and the unfinished nature of the report mean that the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure all stages of the process are described and the response meets the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt to use paragraphing, the text is disjointed and the sentences do not flow smoothly. The use of cohesive devices is very limited, and the abrupt ending makes the overall structure feel incomplete. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraph is weak, and the lack of a concluding sentence or summary further hinders the coherence of the piece. To improve, focus on using linking words such as 'subsequently', 'consequently', or 'furthermore' to connect ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear purpose.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'unlimited stunning factors' and 'make tiny droplets is called as the moist'. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to the process, such as 'moisture' instead of 'moist' and 'leeward' being used correctly but within a poorly constructed sentence. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to geography and processes, and practice using these words in correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('winds comes', 'Diagrame shows the winds comes'), incorrect article usage, and sentence fragments. The sentence structures are generally simple and often lack proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to follow. The attempt at complex structures is often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, 'the air is now dry and continue to flowing downward' contains multiple errors in verb tense and form. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent verb tenses.

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