Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The formation of rain-shadow deserts
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram illustrates the process by which one type desert, known as a rain-shadow, is formed.
Overall, the process consists of seven main stages, beginning with winds approach coast and culminating in relevant.
In the first stage, winds approach coast. Once this is complete, winds pushed upwards. Following this moist air rises and cools, after which clouds form.
Subsequently, rain falls. In the penultimate dry air continues over mountain. Finally, dry winds reach inland areas, thereby completing the formation of rain-shadow deserts cycle.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
Javob 150 ta so‘zdan iborat minimal talabga javob bermaydi, chunki u atigi 83 ta so‘zdan iborat. Bunday sezilarli darajada qisqaligi jarayon tasvirini to‘liq rivojlantira olmaslikka olib keladi. Garchi o‘quvchi yomg‘ir soyasi cho‘llarining shakllanish bosqichlarini aniqlagan bo‘lsa-da, tafsilotlarning yetishmasligi va belgilangan hajmga erisha olmagani topshiriq qisman bajarilganini anglatadi. Yaxshilash uchun o‘quvchi har bir bosqichni kengaytirib, diagrammada ko‘rsatilgan atmosfera sharoitlari va geografik xususiyatlar haqida ko‘proq tavsiflovchi ma’lumotlar berishi kerak.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
Javob jarayonning boshidan oxirigacha aniq ketma-ketlik bilan mantiqiy tashkil etilgan. 'In the first stage', 'Once this is complete', 'Following this' va 'Subsequently' kabi bog‘lovchi vositalardan foydalanish o‘quvchiga voqealar ketma-ketligini kuzatishga yordam beradi. Biroq, xatboshilarga ajratish minimal darajada va umumiy tuzilma juda qisqa. Mantiqiy oqim mavjud bo‘lsa-da, chuqurlikning yetishmasligi va juda qisqa hajm bog‘lovchi vositalarning kengroq doirasini yoki murakkabroq xatboshi uslublarini namoyish etish imkoniyatini cheklaydi.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Ishlatilgan lug‘at boyligi funksional, ammo cheklangan. O‘quvchi 'winds', 'clouds', 'rain' va 'mountain' kabi mavzuga mos, ammo yuqori bandlar uchun kutiladigan aniqlik va xilma-xillik yetishmaydigan oddiy so‘zlardan foydalangan. Shuningdek, 'culminating in relevant' va 'formation of rain-shadow deserts cycle' kabi grammatik va leksik jihatdan noaniq bo‘lgan noqulay iboralar mavjud. Yuqoriroq ball olish uchun o‘quvchi meteorologiya va geografiyaga oid aniqroq ilmiy yoki tavsiflovchi so‘zlarni qo‘shishi kerak.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Javobda bir nechta grammatik xatolar, ayniqsa artikllardan foydalanish va gap tuzilishi bo‘yicha xatolar mavjud. Masalan, 'winds approach coast' o‘rniga 'winds approach the coast' bo‘lishi kerak va 'winds pushed upwards' iborasida yordamchi fe’l tushib qolgan. 'culminating in relevant' gapi tugallanmagan va ma’noga ega emas. O‘quvchi ba’zi murakkab tuzilmalarni qo‘llashga uringan bo‘lsa-da, oddiy grammatikadagi tez-tez uchraydigan xatolar va kerakli artikllarning tushib qolishi umumiy aniqlikka salbiy ta’sir ko‘rsatadi. Yaxshilash uchun gap tuzilmalarining kengroq doirasi va diqqat bilan qayta o‘qib chiqish talab etiladi.
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