Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The formation of rain-shadow deserts
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The process illustrate depicts the sequential stages involved in the manufacture of one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed. As can be seen, the procedure comprises seven distinct phases, commencing with winds approach coast and drawing to a close with dry winds reach inland areas.
At the initial, of the process, winds approach coast. No sooner has this been completed than winds pushed upwards. This is closely followed by a stage in which moist air rises and cools, prior to which clouds form.
Thereafter, rain falls, a step which is, in turn, succeeded by dry air continues over mountain. During the second-to-last phase of the cycle, dry winds reach inland areas. Ultimately, dry winds reach inland areas, at which point the formation of rain-shadow deserts cycle reaches completion.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
Javob 150 ta so'zdan iborat minimal talabga javob bermaydi, bu esa ballga sezilarli ta'sir qiladi. Hisobot jarayonni tasvirlashga urinayotgan bo'lsa-da, mazmuni takroriy va chuqurlikdan yiroq. Bosqichlarning tavsifi juda sodda va meteorologik jarayonning aniq, tahliliy xulosasini berishdan ko'ra, bosqichlarni sanab o'tishga tayanadi. Bundan tashqari, yakuniy xatboshi allaqachon aytilgan ma'lumotlarni takrorlaydi, bu esa hisobotga hech qanday yangilik qo'shmaydi. Yaxshilash uchun har bir bosqichning tavsifini kengaytirishingiz, havo harakati, harorat va yog'ingarchilik o'rtasidagi bog'liqlikni tushuntirishingiz hamda to'liq rivojlangan javob uchun minimal uzunlik talabiga rioya qilishingiz kerak.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
Insho xatboshilarga ajratilgan, bu ijobiy jihat. Biroq, bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanish ko'pincha mexanik va ba'zan noqulay, masalan, 'No sooner has this been completed than...' va 'a step which is, in turn, succeeded by...'. Bu iboralar tabiiy emas, balki majburiydek tuyuladi. Bundan tashqari, g'oyalarning rivojlanishiga yakuniy xatboshining takroriy tabiati to'sqinlik qiladi, chunki quruq shamollar haqidagi bir xil ma'lumotlar qayta aytilgan. Yaxshilash uchun tabiiy ravishda oqib keladigan turli xil bog'lovchi so'zlardan foydalanishga e'tibor qarating va har bir gap jarayonning umumiy tavsifiga yangi ma'lumot qo'shishiga ishonch hosil qiling.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Ishlatilgan lug'at boyligi vazifa uchun umuman olganda yetarli, ammo yuqori bandlarda kutiladigan aniqlik va xilma-xillik yetishmaydi. Siz 'approach', 'pushed' va 'falls' kabi asosiy fe'llarga tayanasiz. Shuningdek, 'condensation', 'precipitation' yoki 'leeward side' kabi jarayonga oid texnik atamalar yetishmaydi. Bundan tashqari, so'z tanlash va kollokatsiyalarda xatolar mavjud, masalan, 'manufacture of one type of desert' iborasi tabiiy jarayon uchun mos emas. Yaxshilash uchun mavzuga oid ko'proq lug'atni kiriting va ilmiy yoki tabiiy hodisalarni aniq tasvirlaydigan so'zlardan foydalanishga e'tibor qarating.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Javobda ravshanlikka ta'sir qiluvchi bir nechta grammatik xatolar mavjud. Kirish gapi noto'g'ri tuzilgan: 'The process illustrate depicts... is formed.' Bu gap tuzilishidagi jiddiy xato. Shuningdek, fe'l shakllari bilan bog'liq muammolar mavjud, masalan, 'dry air continues over mountain' (to'g'risi: 'continues over the mountain') va 'winds approach coast' (to'g'risi: 'winds approach the coast'). Garchi siz ba'zi murakkab tuzilmalarga urinayotgan bo'lsangiz ham, ular ko'pincha noto'g'ri. Yaxshilash uchun ega-kesim moslashuviga e'tibor qarating va gaplaringiz grammatik jihatdan to'liq ekanligiga ishonch hosil qiling. 'the' va 'a' kabi kichik artikllarni tekshirish ham aniqligingizni sezilarli darajada oshiradi.
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