Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The formation of rain-shadow deserts

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The percentage of academic staff is 7% in the library. Full-time undergraduates are 44%. Full-time postgraduates are 25%. Distance learning is 8%. and the Part-time undergraduates are 16% in the library staff

Where these all people like all the staff and undergraduates develops their knowledge about information of all kinds of world with the help of different and expensive books they read books with joyful mood and in peaceful environment By reading the books they improve their thinking skills.

Satisfaction of library users 65% people are very satisfied and 35% fairly satisfied with the oppening hours. 95% are very satisfied and 5% is fairly satisfied with helpfulness of staff. 50% are very satisfied,40%is fairly satisfied and the other 10% are not satisfied with the availability of books. 45% are satisfied 35% fairly satisfied and other 20% is not satisfied with the availablity of journals. 48% are very satisfied 33% are fairly satisfied and other 19% are not satisfied with the reliability of Wi-fi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt requires summarising a diagram about the formation of a rain-shadow desert, but the student has instead written about library staff percentages, undergraduate demographics, and user satisfaction percentages. Because the text fails to address any part of the actual task prompt and discusses an entirely irrelevant topic, it achieves a very low rating for task achievement. There is no attempt to report the main features of the provided process diagram, resulting in a minimal and completely inappropriate response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

The text lacks any logical organization or progression relevant to the prompt. Information is presented as a random collection of statistics about a library rather than a coherent description of a geographical process. Paragraphing is chaotic, with abrupt shifts from staff percentages to user satisfaction figures without appropriate cohesive devices or transitions. While some basic conjunctions and cohesive markers appear, they are used inadequately to link the disparate ideas, making the overall arrangement difficult to follow and lacking a clear central theme.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily focused on numbers, percentages, and simple nouns related to an entirely different topic (e.g., 'academic staff', 'undergraduates', 'library', 'satisfaction', 'journals'). There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'oppening' instead of 'opening' and 'availablity' instead of 'availability'. The student attempts some subject-specific vocabulary, but the range is limited and inadequate for a proper academic task response, though it communicates simple statistical values clearly enough at a basic level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing displays a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of simple and frequently faulty declarative sentences (e.g., 'Full-time undergraduates are 44%', 'Where these all people like all the staff...'). There are frequent errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation, such as missing full stops, run-on sentences, and incorrect article usage (e.g., 'the Part-time undergraduates', 'the availablity'). While the meaning of the individual statistical statements can generally be understood, the high frequency of grammatical slips and awkward phrasing restricts the score.

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