Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The formation of rain-shadow deserts

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This diagram is showing the formation of rain shadow desert,which is thousands of kilometres.

This diagram depicts wwhen the air frpom the sea then the moist air is arising and make the clouds aftrer the formtaion the clouds the rain rain starting.the seconbd thing is here is the the dry air contiues their moving to over mountain and start moving toward the leeward side.the dry winds then reach the inland areas because inland area is imporatnt.

After reaching the inland area theen the rain shadow desert has finalized thier structiure.So, here we can say that that water cam from the sea then it moved upward with the aid of aid then with the moist air it goes in the clod and make the dark clouds and in the end the dry air start moving downeard and reslut came in the form that dry wind reach in inland araes aand amke the shadwon desert.

To conclude the whole daigram,this is the formation of the rain shadow desert which is making by the wind

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the overall process and include several relevant stages: moist air rises, clouds form, rain falls, and dry air moves over the mountain towards inland areas. This shows a partial understanding of the diagram. However, the account is not consistently accurate or clear: the opening says the desert “is thousands of kilometres,” although that label indicates the horizontal scale, and the sequence from coastal winds being forced upwards to rain on the windward side is only loosely described. The final explanation repeats earlier points rather than selecting the main features in a precise overview. To strengthen the response, state the key contrast clearly: moist air loses rain on the windward side, leaving dry air to descend on the leeward side and create an inland rain-shadow desert.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response begins with an introduction, follows parts of the process, and ends with a concluding sentence. Basic links such as “then,” “after reaching,” and “to conclude” help signal sequence. However, there is no clear overall progression because stages are repeated and some connections are difficult to follow. For example, “the rain rain starting” and the later account of clouds and dry air restate information without clarifying how one stage leads to the next. References such as “the second thing” and “here” are also vague. Group the process into a clear sequence—air rises and rains on the windward side, then dry air crosses the mountain and reaches inland—and use paragraphing to separate the overview from the details.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant process vocabulary, including “moist air,” “clouds,” “dry air,” “leeward side,” and “inland areas,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “the rain shadow desert has finalized their structure” and “water cam from the sea.” Repetition of “dry air,” “clouds,” and “inland” also limits precision. Spelling errors—including “formtaion,” “imporatnt,” and “shadwon”—are frequent enough to distract the reader. Build a small bank of accurate process terms and collocations, such as “prevailing winds,” “forced upwards,” “precipitation,” and “descend,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect stages in longer sentences, for example with “After reaching the inland area,” but control of sentence structure is weak. Many clauses are joined without clear grammatical relationships, as in “the moist air is arising and make the clouds,” while verb forms and agreement are often inaccurate: “the rain shadow desert has finalized” and “the dry air start moving.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, making some meanings difficult to follow. Most sentences contain errors, and the attempted complex structures are often faulty. Practise writing short, accurate process sentences first, then combine them with clauses such as “As the air rises, it cools and forms clouds.” Check subject–verb agreement, tense consistency, and punctuation.

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