Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The formation of rain-shadow deserts

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The picture elucidate the information regarding the one type of desert and the rain shadow in desert in differnt method

It can be clearly seem for the illustration,the wind approach the sea to push upward the mountain.Moreover in converts into the moist air rises and cools.Furthermore the clouds are formed,then into the rain clouds.In addition the dry air continous over mountain.Beside it the dry air reaches inland area.

On the other hand,the mountain is situated in the middle of sea and land.It covers thousands of kilometers.The sea side of the mountain is wind ward side.The land side is leward.The cost is in the sea area.And the rain shadow desert in the inland area.

Overall:All the steps are compulasory for make the process complete.If any step is not occur then all the process does not work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant stages, including winds approaching, air rising and cooling, cloud formation, rainfall, and dry air moving inland. You also mention the mountain’s windward and leeward sides and the desert’s inland location. However, the account is incomplete and some relationships are unclear: the key sequence from moist air rising to rain on the windward side, followed by dry air crossing the mountain and creating a rain-shadow desert, is not clearly explained. The overview instead says all steps are compulsory, which does not summarise the diagram’s main process. The response is also 15 words below the required minimum. To improve, give a concise overview of the cause-and-effect process, then describe the stages and locations accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: the response first describes the process and then gives spatial details about the sea, mountain, and inland area. Sequencing words such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “In addition” help signal progression, and the final “Overall” introduces a concluding comment. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and several links are mechanical or confusing. For example, “Furthermore the clouds are formed, then into the rain clouds” does not clearly connect cloud formation to rainfall, while “On the other hand” introduces location details that are not a contrast. Group the stages in their actual order, use clear cause-and-effect links, and make the overview describe the process rather than add a general claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “moist air,” “clouds,” “dry air,” “windward side,” “leeward,” and “inland area,” which helps convey the diagram’s subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make parts difficult to understand, such as “elucidate,” “compulasory,” and “leward.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “the rain shadow in desert in differnt method” and “the rain clouds.” Aim for accurate process vocabulary and natural collocations rather than using complex words that do not fit. For example, describe winds as being forced upwards and air as losing moisture after rainfall; check spelling and use the diagram’s labels consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few connected and complex sentences, such as “Moreover in converts into the moist air rises and cools,” but the structure is faulty and the intended relationship is difficult to follow. Many sentences also contain errors in verb form, agreement, articles, or sentence construction: “the wind approach,” “the clouds are formed,” and “the dry air reaches inland area.” Punctuation is frequently missing after introductory phrases and around sentence boundaries, which further affects readability. Most statements rely on short, simple patterns, with limited accurate control of more complex structures. Practise writing clear present-simple process sentences, for example, “Moist air rises over the mountain, cools, and forms clouds,” and check each sentence for a subject, verb, and appropriate article.

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