Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The formation of rain-shadow deserts

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Ther picture provided the information how to rain shadow desert is made through one type of desert.

First of for, there are seven step for making the rain shadow desert.

1- Winds approches coast

2-winds pushed upwards

3- Moist air rises and cools

4- clouds form

5- Rain falls

6- Dry air continue over mountain

7 Dry winds reach inland area

Look the diagram ,There are following procedure involve or making Rain shadow desert Firtly window approch coast make from sea then wind pushed upwards after that air get moister raise and cool next clouds made from moist air and rain fall on the top of the mountin means this rain fall above the thousand of kilometers.

After forward air dry continue over the mountains and teeward side down gradually or last step started dry wind reach inland areas then make the rain shadow in the inland . its is very amazing procedure.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main sequence, from winds approaching the coast to dry winds reaching inland, and you mention the key outcome: a rain-shadow desert forms inland. However, the response only partly summarises the diagram. Much of the numbered list repeats labels rather than explaining the process, and the later description is unclear about how the stages connect. For example, “rain fall above the thousand of kilometers” misrepresents the scale marker, which indicates the horizontal distance, not where rain falls. The windward and leeward sides are also not clearly explained. To strengthen the report, give a concise overview of the overall cause and outcome, then accurately describe how moist air rises, cools and produces rain before dry air descends on the leeward side.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the numbered stages follow the diagram’s sequence, and the final paragraph attempts to describe the process in order. However, the response does not develop a clear overall progression because the list is repeated in prose, and the relationship between stages is sometimes difficult to follow. Linking expressions such as “Firstly” and “after that” help, but “After forward” and “then” are unclear or awkward, while punctuation and spacing make the prose harder to read. The opening and list also do not form a well-integrated report. Group the stages into a short introduction/overview and a logically ordered process description, using clear links such as “As a result” and “Once the air crosses the mountain.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “coast,” “moist air,” “clouds,” “rain falls,” and “inland areas,” so the reader can recognise the topic and several stages. However, the range is limited and repeated, and frequent spelling and word-choice problems sometimes make the meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “approches,” “mountin,” “teeward,” and “procedure involve.” Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “air get moister” and “make the rain shadow.” Aim for accurate terms from the diagram, including “windward side,” “leeward side,” “precipitation,” and “dry air descends.” Check spelling and choose verbs that describe each stage precisely rather than relying on “make.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both short statements and longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors often make the longer explanations hard to follow. For instance, “there are seven step” has a number-agreement error, while “Dry air continue over mountain” lacks correct verb agreement and article use. The sentence beginning “Look the diagram” also has an incomplete or incorrect structure, and the long sentence beginning “Firtly window approch coast” contains several clauses without clear grammatical connections. Punctuation and capitalisation are also unreliable. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with conjunctions such as “when,” “because,” and “therefore.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and past or present forms consistently.

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