Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graduation careers should include a period of time for studying abroad or work in a workplace in all universities. The students of undergraduate courses have opportunities to get advance knowledge about their field and doing work provided them a practical experience. On the other side it may has some drawbacks that demolish the future of the students.

Firstly, the every student in the university has a dream that he traval to abroad for different purposes like studying in his profession and work with other country'work place for getting higher education and learn advance practical skills.If universities added these kind of activities in their undergraduate courses then their students provided a good results in their field.For example, in pakistan universities undergratuate students have aim to move other developed countries where they persue their studying and work experience. Therefore, if universities provide these oppurtunities have more benefits.

On other hands,

In conclusion, in the undergraduate courses we should added a period of time to study abroad or intership programms that may could more beneficial for students with some disadvantages.Although, these things in university careers have more benefits than drawbacks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and give a general view that study or work abroad would bring more benefits than drawbacks, especially through practical experience and improved skills. However, the response addresses the question only partially: the advantages are mentioned briefly, while the disadvantages are not explained at all, despite the opening claim that they may harm students’ futures. The example about Pakistani students wanting to move to developed countries is relevant but remains general and is not developed to show a specific outcome. The response is also below the required 250 words, which limits the opportunity to explain and support your position. To strengthen this, discuss at least one realistic disadvantage, compare it directly with the benefits, and develop your example with clear details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response with an introduction, a paragraph beginning “Firstly,” and a conclusion. The ideas about gaining knowledge and practical skills are grouped together, and linking expressions such as “For example” and “Therefore” show an effort to connect points. However, progression is limited: the second body paragraph begins “On other hands,” but contains no supporting discussion, so the contrast is left unfinished. The conclusion repeats the general position rather than drawing together developed arguments. Some links are also awkward or unclear, making relationships between ideas harder to follow. Build a complete paragraph for the disadvantages, use topic sentences to guide each paragraph, and ensure every linking phrase introduces an idea that is actually explained.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to education and employment, including “undergraduate courses,” “practical experience,” “developed countries,” and “benefits.” This gives the response a recognisable academic topic focus. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings are inaccurate, sometimes making the intended meaning less clear. Examples include “graduation careers,” “advance knowledge,” “demolish the future,” and “intership programms.” Some phrases, such as “work in a workplace,” are repetitive rather than precise. Aim to learn common academic collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions such as “degree programmes,” “advanced knowledge,” and “damage students’ prospects” would help communicate your ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “if universities added these kind of activities…” and a concluding concessive clause beginning “Although.” This shows an effort to go beyond short, basic sentences. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction frequently affect clarity. For instance, “it may has” should use the base verb after “may,” while “we should added” needs a different verb form. The sentence beginning “if universities added” also lacks a clear, correctly formed main clause. Practise building accurate sentences with modal verbs, conditionals, and subject–verb agreement, then proofread each sentence for a complete grammatical structure.

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