Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many univeristy undergraduate course should a period of time spent study is really crucial for student future higher unveristry give a best education. while after study government provide best tranning and job it is also important for student it is manage all type of expences. i strongly beleive that studying abroad was more beneficial are far more than drawbacks.

On the one hand, maximum university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad was really important for student life. modern countries built a advance university its help to maintain student future also its help government GDP. For example; students go other countries like USA for higher education such as IT department this type of courses is really important for future student study in the USA university and and built own skills also student create own website its help all humanity and generate huge size of money also create a more job opportunities and business developes, secondly it help a government GDP because companies, factories pay text after year government collect a huge size of taxes and spent in the main sectors.

On the other hand, after undergraduate student doing a work is very important for student life and daily expences. poor student maintain own study, home rent, grocery, and other expences. For instance; needy student have no money they want a best job because him family needs. government create a job opportunity for this type of student its help a better life and achieving life goals.

In conclusion, government should create a best job opportunity for student life easier. while i strongly believe that student go abroad for higher study it is really crucial for student life and also government GPD its create a many jobs many opportunities and other it is more beneficial.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear overall view that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks, and you include examples related to overseas study and employment. However, the response only partially addresses the specific comparison in the question: the work-placement paragraph focuses mainly on helping poor students meet expenses, rather than weighing the advantages and disadvantages of making either option compulsory for all undergraduates. The discussion of studying abroad also shifts to government GDP and tax revenue, with limited explanation of how these outcomes benefit students or outweigh costs such as travel and accommodation. The examples are relevant in broad terms but are not sufficiently explained. To strengthen the response, address both sides directly and develop a few focused reasons with clear links to your position. The stated length requirement is met; 12 words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs beginning with “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise its broad structure. However, ideas within paragraphs are often difficult to follow because several points are joined into long, loosely connected sequences. For example, the first body paragraph moves from universities to student skills, websites, jobs, companies, taxes, and government spending without clear transitions or a consistent line of development. Connectors such as “also,” “secondly,” and “while” are used mechanically or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. The conclusion repeats earlier claims rather than drawing them together. Use shorter, logically ordered sentences and make each paragraph develop one main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to education, employment, and the economy, including “higher education,” “job opportunities,” “business,” and “GDP.” This gives you some topic-related language, but the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the message difficult to understand. Examples include “univeristy,” “tranning,” “expences,” and “text” where “tax” is intended. Phrases such as “a huge size of money” and “built a advance university” are not natural collocations. Aim to learn common word partnerships and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions, such as “generate income” or “create employment,” would help communicate your ideas clearly and appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response uses some linking clauses, but grammatical control is very limited. Errors are frequent and sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For example, “Many univeristy undergraduate course should a period of time spent study” lacks a clear verb structure, while “it is manage all type of expences” has problems with verb form and agreement. Articles, plurals, and subject–verb agreement are also often inaccurate, as in “a advance university” and “student create own website.” Long sentences joined with “and” or “also” make these problems harder to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using controlled clauses. Check verb forms, articles, and singular/plural agreement in every sentence.

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