Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

All the universities and undergraduate courses should include abroad studying doing a work placement for a period of time.

As per my opinion, doing this have more advantages like work experience.

To begin with, some of the advantages are person can get a work experience, person can be free from studies for some period of time. For instance, if the universities and undergraduate courses should call the companies in their own institutions, pupils can be selected by them can work for some time student can get experience by that so when companies call them for interviews experience can shared by them. By this way experience can be gained by them.

Furthermore, individuals can be well known by the value of money. In universities they spend money for some tasks. For instance if a person is in university doing remote work he will understand the value of money. Then he will spend money in a good way. The personality is also build by working somewhere as person interacts with new people his communication skills also increases. Now the main disadvantage is that person cannot focus in his studies he will get distracted from his studies.

This concludes that advantages outweigh the disadvantages as university give some time to work somewhere after university and undergraduate courses people have some time to work or look at themselves. Their personality can be build in that period of time. Undergraduate courses are of two to three hours so the whole day you are free you can do what you want.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view in the conclusion that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and you identify relevant benefits such as gaining work experience, learning to manage money and improving communication. However, the position is not consistently established: the opening only says the arrangement has “more advantages,” and the discussion does not clearly compare the benefits with the single disadvantage of reduced study focus. Several ideas remain under-developed. For example, the work-placement example describes companies selecting students but does not explain how this experience would improve their future prospects. The response also shifts between studying abroad and working, without explaining both options or their distinct benefits. Develop fewer points with specific explanations and examples, and make the comparison central throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, a paragraph presenting benefits and a disadvantage, and a concluding statement. Connectors such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “For instance” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, there is no clear progression from one main idea to the next: the first body paragraph combines work experience, time away from study and company interviews, while the next moves from money management to personality and then distraction. Some links are repetitive or unclear, particularly “By this way experience can be gained by them.” Paragraphing and topic sentences could make the argument easier to follow. Organise each paragraph around one main point, explain it in sequence, and use clear references rather than repeatedly saying “person” or “them.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “work experience,” “interviews,” “value of money” and “communication skills.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated or used imprecisely, such as “person,” “experience,” and “work somewhere.” Some collocations and word forms are awkward, including “personality is also build” and “well known by the value of money”; these make parts of the message less natural and occasionally harder to interpret. Aim for more precise terms for the placement and its outcomes, and vary repeated nouns. Learning common combinations such as “gain practical experience” and “develop interpersonal skills” would help express your ideas more clearly and appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including conditional structures such as “if the universities … call the companies … pupils can be selected.” However, the longer constructions are often difficult to follow because clauses are joined without clear grammatical control. There are frequent errors in agreement and verb forms: “doing this have,” “communication skills … increases,” and “personality is also build.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “person can get a work experience” and the extended example beginning “For instance, if the universities…”. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships unclear. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using appropriate punctuation and consistent subject–verb agreement.

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