Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is argued that all universities third level education should be included a time period where students can learn about taking highes degrees from overseas or gather information about working places. Although this development have some drawbacks but I believe that the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages.

Nowadays, people want to continue their study in long run. Mostly, students are taking higher degrees from abroad after completing their undergaduate programmes. While, some people want to do job from outside of their country. As for living in abroad can get them so many facilities and also they can build up their career properly. Additionally, people are being more career-oriented day by day so it can be the great opportunity for them. Furthermore, another significant advantage is they can be financially stable. They can provide a better luxuries life to their family members whern they are earning a lot of money by building a proper career. For example, recently a survey had shown in the New York Times that the ratio of the people who are moving to abroad has increased now over the five years and the percentage is 89% almost. As they can build up their career properly and give a proper life to their family members by earning a lots of money.

On the other hand, this developement have some disadvantages also. When they are moving outside of their country, they have to stay alone. They can feel lonliness, depression and stressed also. In addition, for staying far from family they will not have the same bond with them. There can come some distance which can bother them also. For instance, one of my cousins is staying alone in Japan for his study purpose. Nowadays, he is so depressed and facing some difficulties to continue with the same bond with his closest one. As he do not get much time after completing his study.

To conclude, individual have to face some difficulties for living in abroad to continue their work or study but I believe that the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages. As, they can build their career properly and they can fulfill their family member's need easily.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and you address both sides with relevant points: career and financial opportunities are contrasted with loneliness and weaker family ties. However, the response only partially fulfils the specific task because it often discusses moving abroad for a degree or job in general, rather than a required period of study abroad or a work placement as part of an undergraduate course. The benefits of a placement and how either experience would help students are not clearly explained. The survey and cousin examples support your points, but the first is not connected closely to the course requirement, and the second is brief. Focus your explanation and examples on the proposed university experience.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of your argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes repetitive or unclear. In the advantages paragraph, career development and financial stability are repeated in phrases such as “build up their career properly” and “earning a lot of money,” while the survey example is followed by another restatement rather than a new explanation. Linking words such as “Additionally,” “Furthermore,” and “As” are used mechanically, and “While” begins a fragment. Improve cohesion by giving each paragraph a clear sequence—point, explanation, relevant example—and use pronouns and connectors only where their relationships are clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “career-oriented,” “financially stable,” “loneliness,” and “depression,” so your meaning is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, collocation, word-form, and spelling errors make parts awkward or unclear. Examples include “taking highes degrees,” “working places,” “a better luxuries life,” and “a lots of money.” There are also spelling errors such as “undergradute,” “developement,” and “lonliness.” Aim to learn common academic collocations and check word forms and spelling carefully. More precise terms for structured overseas study and work experience would also help keep the vocabulary focused on the question.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “Although,” “When,” and “As,” but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently. For example, “all universities third level education should be included” has an unclear grammatical structure, and “Although this development have some drawbacks but…” combines incompatible linking patterns and has subject–verb disagreement. Other examples include “As for living in abroad can get them…” and “As he do not get much time,” where clause structure and verb agreement are inaccurate. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention, as in “While, some people…” and “As,” at the start of the conclusion. Practise building accurate sentences before adding multiple clauses, and check agreement, articles, and clause completeness.

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