Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

To commence , the university level of education is more crucial for any learner , to obtain this level of education in life play an important role in the coummunity , Moreover , all university should give a few abroad courses in undergraduate, I compelety agree with the notion.

Overall, in massive universities in all around the world they provide in diffierent courses a period of time , However some universities gives more other courses in out of coumtry this way is much better for learner life ,Futhermore this types of coures do assist to built strong career, and more opporunities in life .

Initally, all of country raise in world is compelety depends on Educational profession, if each country provided to better facilities in education they automatic run to grow and financialy enhace,on the other hand to gives more courses to aborad and include a period time to considerably to assist the studentand everyone choice good career for life and financialy support to our family .

At secondly, in department of educational is extremely better and everyone take to education and select me more opporunity in life , Moreover this is the basic need for men life and show rhe community to do good works in country and sppurt others diffierent form and face various difficulties in society.

In conclusion, undergraduate courses is sidnifficantly in university and include a time period , individuals spend studing abroad and do better placement ,moreover to obtain different opporunities in life and save career for everyone .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear position in the opening—“I completely agree”—and return to the idea that overseas study or placements can support careers and create opportunities. These points are relevant to the question. However, the response does not explain the advantages and disadvantages in a balanced way or clearly show why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Most claims, such as “assist to build strong career,” are asserted rather than explained with a specific reason or example. Some discussion of education and national development is only loosely connected to the comparison the task asks for. Develop two or three relevant benefits, acknowledge a realistic drawback, and explain why the benefits are more significant, using a concrete example to support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response is divided into an introduction, several body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise an intended essay structure. You also use linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “on the other hand” and “In conclusion.” However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the second paragraph repeats broad claims about courses and opportunities, while later paragraphs shift to national development and education without showing how each point supports the argument. Some connectors are used where the relationship between ideas is unclear, and sentence boundaries are difficult to follow. Organise each body paragraph around one distinct reason, explain it in sequence, and use linking words only when they accurately signal contrast, addition or result.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to education and employment, including “undergraduate,” “career,” “financially” and “opportunities.” This gives the response some topic-specific language. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling errors or inaccurate word combinations make several phrases difficult to understand, for example “coummunity,” “diffierent courses,” “built strong career” and “financialy enhace.” Some expressions, such as “the basic need for men life,” are unclear in meaning. Work on accurate spelling and natural collocations, and choose precise words rather than repeating general terms such as “better” and “opportunity.” Learning phrases such as “gain practical experience” and “broaden career prospects” would help express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect clauses and use longer sentence forms, for example in the sentence beginning “if each country provided…,” but control is limited. Errors in sentence structure, agreement, verb forms, articles and punctuation occur frequently and sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For instance, “all university should give” has an agreement problem, while “some universities gives” also mismatches subject and verb. The opening sentence contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation, making its meaning hard to follow. Build accuracy first with clear subject–verb–object sentences, then combine ideas using correctly formed clauses. Check agreement, verb forms and sentence boundaries carefully, and use a full stop when one complete idea ends.

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