Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

MANY PEOPLE BELIEVES THAT EDUCATIONAL HUBS SHOULD PROVIDE A SPECIFIC TIME FOR FOREIGN STUDIES OR INTERNSHIPS FOR THE BECHLORS. SOME OF THEM DO NOT AGREE WITH THIS IDEA DUE TO THE FINANCIAL BURDEN ON THE STUDENTS. YET, IT IS THE BEST OPTION FOR THE IN WORLD EXPERIENCE MOREOVER TO ENHANCE THEIR KNOWLEDGE SO ADVANTAGES SIMPLY OUTWEIGHTS THE DISADVANTAGES.

STUDYING OR WORKING IN FOREIGN NATIONS FOR A SPECIFIC TIME PERIOD CAN BE BENFICIAL TO UNDERGRADUATES IN VARIOUS ASPECTS.FIRSTLY, THEY GET TO KNOW MORE ABOUT THEIR REPECTIVE FIELD IN THE FOREIGN NATION. FOR INSTANCE, IF THE STUDENTS OF AUTO-MOBILE ENGINEERING AND GOT AN OPPORTUNITY TO STUDY OR TO WORK IN GERMANY. THEY COULD GET TONS OF INFORMATION ABOUT THEIR FIELD. SECONDLY, IF THE UNDERGRADUATE HAD STUDIED OR WORKED ABROAD THAN IT WOULD CREATE A STRONG BACKROUND IN THEIR RESUME. BY WHICH THEY COULD GET A JOB EASILY.IN ADDITION, THEY WILL ALSO GET THE EXPERIANCE OF LIMITED TIME WHICH WILL PROVIDE THEM THE PRACTICAL KNOWLEDGE OF THEIR RESPECTED FIELD.

ALTHOUGH, HAVING THE OUTRAGIOUS ADVANTAGES YET IT HAVE SOME DISADVANTAGES AS WELL. THEIR SHOULD THE ARRANGMENT OF A BETTER FINANCIAL CONDITION TO STUDY OR TO WORK ABROAD . FOR EXAMPLE, COST OF LIVING, FOOD AND ALL THE DAILY REQUIREMENTS. NOT ALL THE STUDENTS CAN AFFORD THIS TREMENDOUS EXPENSE. HOWEVER, IT HAS BEEN RESTRICTED TO FEW FIELDS ONLY. THEREFORE, NOT EVERY STUDENT GETS THE CHANCE TO TRAVEL FOREIGN COUNTRIES FOR STUDY OR FOR INTERSHIPS.

IN CONCLUSION, DESPITE OF HAVING SOME PRACTICAL DRAWBACKS I STILL CONCLUDE THAT CONS SURPASSES PROS EASILY. HOWEVER, THE PROBLEM OF THE FINANCE CAN BE SOLVED IF THE UNIVERSITY PROVIDE SOME SPONSERSHIPS TO THE BRIGHT PUPILS. MOREOVER, LAWS SHOULD BE IMPLIMENTED TO EXPAND THE OPPORTUNITY TO STUDY OR WORK ABROAD TO VARIOUS FIELDS.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all parts of the prompt and maintained a clear position throughout. You identified both advantages and disadvantages, and your conclusion provides a summary of your stance. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention 'auto-mobile engineering' in Germany, the explanation remains brief. To reach a higher band, ensure that each supporting point is fully extended with more detailed reasoning or specific examples. Additionally, there is a contradiction in your conclusion where you state 'cons surpasses pros' despite arguing for the advantages earlier, which suggests a misunderstanding of the phrase.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In addition' to signal the progression of your argument. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and the transition between ideas could be smoother. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the link between the resume and the job is slightly abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences flow naturally into one another would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'internships', 'undergraduates', and 'sponsorships'. However, there are several instances of incorrect word choice and spelling errors, such as 'bechlors' (bachelors), 'outragious' (outrageous), and 'implimented' (implemented). Furthermore, some collocations are unnatural, such as 'in world experience'. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of academic terms and practicing collocations to ensure your word choices are more precise and natural in an academic context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Many people believes', 'it have some disadvantages'), article usage, and sentence fragments. For instance, 'For instance, if the students of auto-mobile engineering and got an opportunity...' is an incomplete sentence. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the clarity of your writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will help you achieve a higher level of accuracy.

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