Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's contemporary world, education is the most crucial and beneficial activity for both children and youngers. Some classes should include to learn about to spent to doing a work placement or to learning about studying abroad, in all undergraduate universities. In this essay I will discuss the benefits of including courses that seek about learning or working outside of their country.

To commence with, a major benefit of including some courses that will seek about abroad study, is that, that the students will be knowing about the international level advancements. To elaborate this, most of the candidates are more interesting about studying abroad, but they are not know about who to plan to. Whenever the all national universities provided a period of time spent to understand their students about to purse their master degree program abroad. For instance, all pakistani undergraduate universities does not a course to seek about learning outside of country. As a result, most of the students are not aware, and they miss this meaningful opportunity.

Moving Further, another advantage of including few courses in all university is that, to learn here in their home country, and then go for doing work in another country for better future. In the other words, gaining knowledge from your bachelor university as well as doing some experience in your relevant fields about two to three years. After that if you plan to work abroad, they you have enough knowledge about how to find or search my fields related job in other country. To cite an example, if a student plan to work abroad just after his graduation, and have not enough knowledge about it, then he or she will hair a consultant which may or may not give him a meaningful services. Hence at least one subject is mandatory to aware students about abroad working placement.

To sum up, giving awareness about studying abroad is crucial for every university to provide courses upon him to the students. In contrast, work placement is also vital for graduated students, so including courses upon them is considerable for each and every university.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the advantages of studying abroad and work placements. However, the position is not fully developed. While you mention that these courses are beneficial, the essay lacks a balanced discussion of the 'disadvantages' as requested by the prompt ('Do you think the advantages... outweigh the disadvantages?'). By focusing almost exclusively on the benefits, the response is one-sided. Furthermore, some ideas, such as the mention of Pakistani universities, are under-developed and do not clearly link back to the core argument of whether these programs should be mandatory for all undergraduate courses.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'To commence with' and 'Moving Further' are used, but the internal flow of sentences is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive structures. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between national universities and student awareness is disjointed. The progression of ideas is present but lacks the logical sophistication required for a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally impede communication, such as 'youngers' instead of 'young people', 'seek about' instead of 'seek information about', and 'hair a consultant' (likely meaning 'hire'). The range of vocabulary is sufficient to express basic ideas but lacks the flexibility and precision needed to discuss the topic in an academic manner. You rely on simple, high-frequency words and struggle to use more sophisticated academic terminology effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('universities does not a course'), incorrect verb forms ('are not know about'), and awkward sentence construction. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, these are often faulty and contain errors that make the meaning difficult to follow at times. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The majority of sentences contain errors, which prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures before attempting more complex ones.

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