Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Writing task-2

Every one in human existaces have different way of thinking and different mindsets and its their right, I do personally think advantages of studying abroad or doing work would outweigh its disadvantage.

To commence with, There are a lot of benefits from studying abroad or doing work such as it will help the person to grow, boost their life and confidance which can't be acheived unless and until a person leaves its comfort zone, There are also some example which, I personally have seen and witnessed it throught my eyes. This guy had no confidance, no clarity about life and he used to lack at many point in life, After he decided to go to abroad to study for bachelor's and throught his hard work he successfully acheived all of it at what he was lacking

Further more, throught working or doing a work placement could also help in various aspect such as earning more, can learn new techniques can have idea from various different sources, can learn new language, can also improve its stats and status in real life. I am also wishing and planning to go abroad for studing because you can learn someting new and learning everyday it what life is and it will help me as in other aspect as it will be able to learn to what is not is my country.

Conclusion, Any thing that give you opportunity to learn and build something anyone should not miss this and there are more advantage which outweigh disadvantage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention personal growth and career benefits, the arguments are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. The example provided about 'this guy' is anecdotal and lacks the academic tone required for an IELTS essay. To improve, you should focus on providing more sophisticated, generalized arguments—such as the impact on global employability or cultural intelligence—rather than relying on personal anecdotes. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not effectively summarize the main points presented in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, 'To commence with' and 'Further more' are used, but the internal flow of sentences is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and run-on sentences. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'There are also some example which, I personally have seen and witnessed it throught my eyes.' The logical progression between ideas is often interrupted by grammatical errors, making the text feel disjointed at times. Improving the use of transition words and ensuring each sentence follows logically from the previous one will help significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic words like 'good', 'help', and 'learn' throughout the text. There are also frequent spelling errors, such as 'existaces', 'confidance', 'throught', and 'studing'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the high frequency of spelling mistakes prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to education and employment, and pay closer attention to the spelling of common words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Every one... have'), incorrect pronoun usage ('leaves its comfort zone'), and awkward sentence structures. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the ones attempted are often faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several comma splices and missing full stops. The majority of sentences contain errors that, while not always impeding communication, are persistent and distracting. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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