Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.
Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Over all university undergraduate courses should includes a time period of time spend studying another country or doing work placement. I am completely agree from advantages and I sport my opinion.
TO COMMENCE WITH, firstly, I give some example and reason to sport my own opinion. From my knowledge or observation all university start undergraduate courses to spend time period in another country. It is a good option because in my country have not a lot of colleges and university so their students had not good education and not create him own goals in my country. And no more educated teachers and professional goals. so that is the best way ti go to abroad and continue study in another country and get higher education in their country.AND built their future on high stand. FOR EXAMPLE, When a student go to abroad for higher study . That is a very good opinion and every one see this and step by step every go another country for higher study. THUS,Some time when they free they part time to continue their study in abroad.
ON the second hand, Some students are belonged poor family and when they go to abroad and complete study their. And go back their own country and stared a teaching and another job. SO they sport their family and their government and many professions in this way over country create a great and successful future. FOR EXAMPLE, A student get higher education from another country and came back . AND get a job or teaching to sported their country children.
IN CONCLUSION, I think it is a very good and peaceful plan to start undergraduate courses for study abroad. And when they get a higher education from another country and came back their country and sport their people and children.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of the proposal. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While you mention the benefits of education and supporting one's family, the arguments lack depth and specific, well-explained examples. The essay relies on generalizations rather than providing a structured analysis of the advantages and disadvantages as requested. To improve, you should focus on expanding your points with more logical reasoning and ensuring that the connection between studying abroad and the resulting benefits is clearly articulated for the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'ON the second hand' instead of 'On the other hand'. The progression of ideas is occasionally disjointed, and the transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt. While there is an attempt to use linking words like 'TO COMMENCE WITH' and 'IN CONCLUSION', these are used in a way that feels forced rather than natural. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help the flow of your writing significantly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. You frequently use the word 'sport' incorrectly (likely intending 'support') and 'good' or 'very good' to describe various concepts. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'peaceful plan' to describe an educational policy. To reach a higher band, you need to move beyond basic vocabulary and attempt to use more precise, academic terminology related to education and professional development. Focusing on correct collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing will be essential for improvement.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'courses should includes'), article usage (e.g., 'in my country have not a lot of colleges'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, making them difficult to parse. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect word forms.
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