Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.
Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Do tertiary students are required to undergo field training or choose to study overseas?. The trend of going abrod will be benificial in terms of experiencing multi-dimentional culture and working side by side along with studies while the field traing equipes learner with skills and experiences. I think there will be more possitive impacts if we choose studying further.
Most people prefer to study abroad after graduating high school for exposure towards different cultures and also earn handful income by working partime jobs. This is because students can work for some hours while studying this flexibility really open oppertunity to earn as well as study. For example many asian students are rushing to counrty like Australia because Australia has lots of students from various countries. Not only that sudent get 48 hours fornight to work while studying
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether the advantages of studying abroad or doing a work placement outweigh the disadvantages. However, it suffers from a severe length penalty, containing only 137 words against the minimum requirement of 250 words. Because of this, ideas are very brief and underdeveloped. While a basic position is stated in the introduction, the arguments regarding cultural experience and part-time work are superficial and cut short. Furthermore, the prompt's reference to work placements is largely ignored in favor of focusing solely on studying abroad. This falls short of the expectations for higher band levels, leading to a score of 4.0 based on the severe under-length and limited task coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into very short paragraphs, and the overall organizational structure is quite weak. Progression of ideas is difficult to follow because thoughts are fragmented and abruptly introduced. Cohesive devices are used minimally and sometimes awkwardly, such as 'This is because' and 'Not only that'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and paragraphing is inadequate due to the extremely short length of the text. Although basic punctuation is present, the lack of a cohesive framework and logical flow places this response at a Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors ('abrod' for abroad, 'benificial', 'dimentional', 'traing', 'equipes', 'possitive', 'partime', 'oppertunity', 'counrty', 'sudent', 'fornight'). There are also awkward word choices and collocations, such as 'earn handful income'. While the writer attempts some less common words like 'multi-dimentional', inaccurate spelling and limited control restrict the lexical range. Communication is occasionally strained due to these errors, aligning the vocabulary performance with Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is very low. There are frequent errors in basic sentence structure, such as the opening question 'Do tertiary students are required...'. Subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and prepositions are frequently mishandled, as seen in 'student get 48 hours fornight to work'. Punctuation is also erratic. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from reaching a higher band, though basic meaning is sometimes recoverable, fitting a Band 4.0.
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