Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

"The topic disscuss that undergraduate courses.Many courses such as Allied health sciences,Medical Sciences and Pharmacy contains in universty.Every universty is a different criteria of further courses.This is beacuse Many universties have different subjects.So undergraduate students are new students.For example:Bachelors students.They get new admissions.They are unable to find the criteria of universty.The advantages of undergraduate students are they finishes their assignmets,Lectures on time.And get good grades.And good central grade point.On the other Hand doing a work placement also plays an important role.Because Some students are unable to pay their fees in universty.So they are doing their works like marketing,Call centre and many others work.The advantages of work placement are they should pay their universty fees.They are able to send money in their home.So study and Work both plays an important role in Life.You dont feel happy with out money.And by work many students thinks that they are able to get money in their home.So they are felling happy.The Conclusion is that undergraduate students should include a period of time spent and also studying abroad.Because Studying abroad many opportunities.For example:Mansu universties gets Scholarships of universty.You can get many scholarships by good grades.And by good marks.But the disadvantages of studying abroad are You are felling alone.Your eating style and living style are different from your country.In my opinion Many students want to go out studying abroad many scholarships like Masters and Phd.So both are important which plays a vital role for a period of time spent and studying abroad.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether undergraduate courses should include study abroad or work placements, but the discussion is confused and only partially relevant. The student conflates studying abroad with undergraduate admission criteria and fee payment issues. Furthermore, the response falls short of the minimum word requirement, containing only 246 words instead of the required 250, which negatively impacts the development of the task. While a position is stated in the conclusion, the ideas remain under-developed and lack clear logical support throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from a lack of clear overall progression and paragraphing. The response is presented as a single, dense block of text with very poor organisational structure. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. For example, transitions like 'For example:' and 'So' are overused inappropriately to link unrelated ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, leading to confusion between the concepts of university admissions, paying tuition fees, and studying abroad.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently revolving around words like 'universty', 'courses', 'students', and 'money'. There are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'disscuss' instead of 'discuss', 'felling' instead of 'feeling', and 'Mansu universties'. The range is limited and minimally adequate to express basic ideas, but frequent inaccuracies in collocation and word formation cause strain for the reader and impede clear communication at times.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response, featuring a very limited range of sentence structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex forms that result in major errors. Examples include 'The topic disscuss that undergraduate courses', 'Every universty is a different criteria', and 'Because Some students are unable to pay their fees in universty.So they are doing their works'. Frequent punctuation and capitalization errors, alongside tense inconsistencies, cause significant difficulty for the reader.

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