Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Now a days going for abroadstudies and doing jobs in abroad are common. All university undergraduarte course should include a period of time spent at studying abroad or doing a work placement.This statement have avantages and disadvantages whhich are wriiten below.

firstly,The advantages of styding abroad and working there.If we went abroad for our studies in aborad.We can have a new culture different than ours.We can learn new languages skill.We can taste the new foods.We can learn the things about the different country.We meet different people from differnt countrys.We can share our tradtions to them and we can also get know the new traditions.We can get to know of new style of studying in abroad.We can get experince new thing.In working sector we can earn good amount of money.We can better experince of working skills.In abroad workig is hard which can teach the new things about the new works.We can get the better experice in work.

Secondly,The disadvantages if abroad the main thing is there will no onw of our family member who can help us.In any cost we have to do work and surive.we will also have homesickness. We will miss the most our family and friends who use to help us in our harddays.But there will no one who gona help there if we get trouble.Any coast we have to do our work and we have to study also.we will face some languages barriers also at first.We will be new there and we do not know the language it will diffcult to go out buy things and to have the job also.There will be the culture difficulties to.

In conclusion,in point of view i think the advantages is more greater than disadavantges beacuse we in abroad country we can have better knoweldege in study.It will hard to get know the language at fiirst but after knowing that language it will benfits of us.After the knowing the language we can study easily and we can get better job oppturinities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of including a study abroad or work placement period in university courses, culminating in a clear overall position in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive, particularly in the first body paragraph where multiple points are listed as short, simple sentences without sufficient expansion or specific examples. Phrases like "We can taste the new foods" and "We can get experince new thing" touch upon relevant concepts but lack the depth expected for higher bands. The arguments remain somewhat generalised and superficial throughout. Therefore, this performance aligns best with the Band 5 descriptors, where the task is addressed, but ideas remain underdeveloped and limited.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response exhibits basic organisation with an introduction, two body paragraphs attempting to separate advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is hampered by extremely choppy sentence structures and very limited or repetitive cohesive devices, such as starting multiple sentences with "We can" or relying on basic markers like "firstly" and "Secondly". Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks smooth transitions. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as "we will miss the most our family and friends who use to help us in our harddays.But there will no one who gona help there if we get trouble." These issues reflect the Band 4 to Band 5 threshold, where some organisation is present, but cohesion is inadequate and repetitive, making the overall arrangement somewhat mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily constrained. The student relies on elementary words and phrases like "good amount of money", "hard days", and "new things". There are numerous word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, including "undergraduarte", "avantages", "whhich", "wriiten", "styding", "aborad", "tradtions", "experince", "workig", "surive", "homesickness", "oppturinities", and "knoweldege". These lexical errors and the limited range of vocabulary frequently strain the reader and reflect the characteristics of Band 4, where basic vocabulary and frequent errors impede clear communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and frequently faulty sentence structures. There is a near-total absence of complex structures, and where attempts are made, they contain severe grammatical errors, such as "This statement have avantages and disadvantages whhich are wriiten below" and "If we went abroad for our studies in aborad.We can have a new culture different than ours." Punctuation and sentence boundary errors are pervasive, including missing spaces after periods, sentence fragments, and run-on structures. Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense consistency (e.g., mixing present and past incorrectly) cause significant difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.

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