Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

All the courses of under graduate students for university spent their period of time to thier studies.most of the students will gop to the abroad for study purpose or to take a good job and secure their future.

Firstly,the study of intermmediate students to abroad will to improve their studies and to get a good job or to secure their future .The advantage of studing abroad will to become a succceeful person .however,the study of abroad is

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 250 words, containing only 77 words, and stops abruptly mid-sentence. Due to this severe under-length issue, the task is only addressed in a very minimal and incomplete way. The writer attempts to introduce the topic of studying abroad and securing future jobs, but the position is underdeveloped, and the arguments are not supported with relevant examples. According to the band descriptors, a response that is significantly under-length and trails off without fully exploring the prompt cannot achieve a passing score for Task Achievement. To improve, you must write at least 250 words, fully address all parts of the prompt, and develop your ideas with clear explanations and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organization of the text is heavily disrupted by the extremely short length and the fact that the response cuts off abruptly. While the writer attempts to use a transition word ('Firstly'), the lack of a proper paragraph structure and the sudden termination of the text make logical progression impossible to maintain. Paragraphing is entirely insufficient, consisting of two very brief, fragmented blocks of text. Referencing and cohesive devices are rudimentary and mechanical. To reach a higher band score, you need to structure your essay into a clear introduction, well-developed body paragraphs with logical transitions, and a concluding paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used throughout the response is extremely basic, repetitive, and restricted. The writer relies heavily on simple words and phrases such as 'study purpose', 'good job', and 'secure their future', which are repeated multiple times ('secure their future' appears twice). There are also noticeable lexical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'intermmediate students' and 'studing abroad will to become a succceeful person'. Spelling mistakes like 'succceeful' and 'thier' further reduce the lexical quality. To improve, you should expand your vocabulary range and learn the correct collocations and spellings for academic topics.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent errors. Examples include 'All the courses of under graduate students for university spent their period of time to thier studies', which is grammatically confused and difficult to parse. Errors in word order, prepositions, and verb forms are persistent, such as 'most of the students will gop to the abroad'. Punctuation is also poorly managed, with missing spaces after commas and an unfinished sentence at the very end. To achieve a higher score, you need to demonstrate a wider variety of grammatical structures with greater accuracy.

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