Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowdays, competiton is rising all uiversity should add something in their curiculam such as a period of the time spent studying abroad moreover, giving placement classes.

First of all, it is worth considering that the level of jobs competiton is rising nowdays . subsequently governments should take some action for that like giving class abroad because, in india right now unemployement rate is approximately 70 percent subsequently, it is a better choice to have knowledge of foregin studies which open new option for a student and may can increase the job option for them and salary. for instance, suppose if a child has completes his bachlors in compute application in india he is getting a job 25000 as in foreging he is getting [redacted phone] that may can shift his mind to go foregin and that could only by the assist of studying abroad because that class clear all doubt by telling all advantages and disadvantages of it. which will help in decission.

Moreover, if a child is not having a good financial background and want to have good salary package job within country, in that situation work placemnts can guids us due to fact that it will tell the manner of giving interview for instance, how to greet them and what are the key points of that particualy firm. that we can use to recruite.

In conclusion, weighing up both the sides of the arguments i firmly, believe that advantages of claases of study abroad and doing work placements outweigh it disadvantages because this make us one step forward from other to have a better job.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt only partially, attempting to discuss whether studying abroad and work placements should be included in university courses. However, the position is not always clearly maintained, and the ideas presented are limited and under-developed. For instance, the writer mentions that the unemployment rate in India is approximately 70 percent, but this point lacks proper context and logical expansion. Additionally, the development shifts abruptly between studying abroad and work placements without fully exploring the advantages and disadvantages of both as requested by the prompt. To move to a higher band, the writer needs to present a fully developed position, ensuring that every main idea is supported with clear, relevant explanations and examples rather than relying on generalized assertions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays some organization, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the repetitive and mechanical use of 'subsequently' and 'moreover'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the line of argument. For example, the second paragraph crams multiple distinct ideas—unemployment rates, salary comparisons in computer applications, and decision-making classes—into one long, convoluted block of text. To improve, the writer must ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single central idea and uses a wider, more accurate variety of cohesive links to connect sentences smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, containing noticeable errors in spelling, word choice, and word form that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples of lexical inaccuracies include 'Nowdays', 'competiton', 'curiculam', 'foregin', 'bachlors', 'compute', 'decission', and 'placemnts'. The range of vocabulary is restricted, and attempts to use less common items result in awkward phrasing, such as 'giving class abroad' or 'assist of studying abroad'. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to expand their lexical repertoire, pay closer attention to standard spelling conventions, and ensure that word choices accurately reflect the intended meaning and context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing exhibits a limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple or faulty complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, articles, and prepositions, such as 'all uiversity should add', 'a period of the time', 'if a child has completes', 'is getting a job 25000 as in foreging he is getting 300000', and 'outweigh it disadvantages'. Punctuation is also problematic, with commas frequently misplaced, as seen in 'weighing up both the sides of the arguments i firmly, believe'. These frequent errors can cause difficulty and distraction for the reader. To progress, the writer should practice forming accurate complex sentences and thoroughly review basic grammatical rules such as tense consistency and article usage.

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