Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

As education is important to

earn money and for respectfully

life. As before 16-year

education it must be

time period where student

experiment experience the real

life work and they must have

given time to go aborad

and and work and

know about their career

how practically it proform

accourding to their courses

studies. And Interact with

other and know how

it sounds in realk life

and they will able to

earn their money after

the graduating life.

Most existed about that

other one believe that

firstly they complete their

study and have interest in

other activities or work

and then they will able

more confidentially performed

their duties with whole

interest and energy.

It will not drain their

energy in both study and

work.

In my perspective it must

the time period for

learning the practical work

during study we will be

able to balance the

life between two different

things. It make the person

to feel the responsibilities

before actually time.

It make more aimful person

who know how react the

situation differently in every

aspect of life. They built different things in their personality during their work and face the thing social life after interact with different types of people and learn how to handle them and do their work in well manner. It confident them to face difficult situation of life they become fearless as before they think to have good marks build their good life and worried about marks and worried if that fail in ant subject after practical life they become more then before

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially, expressing a personal perspective on whether studying abroad or doing work placements should be included in undergraduate courses. However, the position is not always clear, and the ideas presented are limited and under-developed. For instance, the writer mentions that students need to 'experiment experience the real life work' and 'know about their career', but these points are not extended with clear explanations or relevant examples. Furthermore, some parts of the prompt regarding the comparison between advantages and disadvantages are only touched upon superficially, such as the counter-argument that students should complete their study first before engaging in work activities. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to present a fully developed position with well-supported arguments addressing all parts of the prompt directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is some basic organisation in the text, but it lacks a clear overall progression. The response is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow within and between them is frequently disrupted by abrupt shifts in ideas. Cohesive devices are largely inadequate, inaccurate, or over-used, such as the repetitive starting of sentences with 'As' or 'It make'. Reference words are sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact progression of thought, such as in the final paragraph where multiple ideas about social life and facing difficult situations are linked without clear signposts. To improve, the writer must use a wider range of cohesive devices accurately and ensure that each paragraph builds logically upon the previous one to create a smooth, coherent argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'respectfully life', 'practically it proform', and 'aimful person', but these attempts result in noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and collocation that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Spelling errors, such as 'aborad' and 'ant', also appear. While the student manages to convey basic ideas related to education and work experience, the lack of precision restricts the clarity of the message. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to expand their lexical range and pay closer attention to word formation and contextual collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex forms that are often faulty. There are persistent errors in verb forms, tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles throughout the text, such as 'student experiment experience' and 'they will able more confidentially performed'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences that lack appropriate separation, particularly visible in the long final paragraph. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and obscure the intended meaning. To improve, the writer must focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct verb tenses, and reducing grammatical mistakes by writing shorter, clearer sentences.

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