Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Now days, students are more time given for studying abroad or doing a work placememt.

All university undergradute courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

It is a adavantages for students. Their are doing a study in abroad and they are doing work and study both together that is greatful for time include. Learner are always want a their courses should include a period of time reasons is they are studying abroad or doing a work placement also. that is a main reasons. it is helpful for learners. university should give a time then students are more money earn and they are easy way to live their life. They are satisfied there work and study. They are good motivations given for their work.

it is positive side for students.

However, some negetive effect doing this time period include. students are not doing a more study because they are not focus on study only focus on work placement. students are only doing a work and they are not much doing a study. It is first reason.Learns are also free about they study because they are know about a time given a university. They are only doing other activities and work only. It is seconed reason.

In abroad students are study doing they are not return back their home town. They are spend a more time on workplace and they are earn a money and they are not comeback their hometown. It is a main reason.

In my view, abroad university are not give a more time

for study and workplace beacuse some time it is harmful for there country students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both sides of the question by describing possible benefits, such as earning money and gaining motivation, and drawbacks, including reduced focus on study and not returning home. However, the response does not clearly answer whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. The final view—that this arrangement may be harmful to students’ home country—is difficult to connect to the comparison asked for, and the position is not maintained clearly. Most points are asserted rather than explained; for example, the claim that students “are more money earn” is not supported with a specific example or a clear explanation of how a placement benefits them. To strengthen the response, state your position directly and develop each main reason with a relevant explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, a benefits section, a drawbacks section and a concluding view. The transition “However” helps signal a change in direction, and “first reason” and “second reason” show an effort to order points. Nevertheless, ideas within paragraphs are often repeated or placed together without a clear logical link. For instance, several sentences repeat that students work and study, while the point about not returning to their hometown appears without explaining how it relates to the main argument. References such as “It is a main reason” are unclear because the reader cannot tell which claim they refer to. Use one focused paragraph for each side, connect each supporting detail explicitly to its main point, and make the conclusion answer the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “students,” “study,” “work,” “time” and “reason.” Some wording makes the intended meaning difficult to understand, as in “students are more money earn” and “they are satisfied there work and study.” There are also spelling errors, including “placememt,” “adavantages,” “negetive” and “seconed,” which reduce accuracy. You do make relevant attempts to express ideas about motivation, employment and studying abroad, but the range of precise academic vocabulary is limited. Build a small set of accurate phrases for discussing benefits and drawbacks, such as “gain practical experience” and “balance academic commitments with work,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors in basic grammar sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. Examples include “Their are doing a study in abroad,” “Learner are always want,” and “university should give a time then students are more money earn.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction. Several ideas are joined into long strings without clear punctuation, while other sentences are fragments, such as “It is positive side for students.” There is an attempt to use a contrastive clause beginning “However,” but control remains weak. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clear clauses using “because,” “although” and “so”; check each sentence for a subject, a correctly formed verb and complete punctuation.

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