Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

FIRST OF ALL THE STUDENT WHO ARE NOW IN THE UNDERGRADUATE COURSES THEY SHOULD HAVE TO TAKE PART IN SOME WORK LIKE WORK PLACEMENT AND INTERNSHIPS.IT CAN ENHANCE THEIR ABILITY OF WORK AND ALSO THEIR SKILL TO ENGAGE WITH WORK . MOREOVER THROUGH THIS THEY CAN LEARN HOW THEY CAN USE THEIR ACADEMIC SKILL INTO PRACTICAL WORK.

THIS HAS LOT OF ADVANTAGES LIKE THEIR EXPOISURE OF WORK WILL INCREASE.

SECOND ONE THEY CAN UTILIZE THEIR KNOWLADGE IN REAL LIFE.

ANOTHER ADVANTAGE IS THEY CAN MEET THE PEOPLE RELATED WITH THEIR FIELD.

FURTHER MORE ALL STUDNET FROM DIFFERENT DEPATMENT SHOULD HAVE TO DO EXTRA CERICULLER ACTIVITIES.

FOR GETTING A WORK PLACEMENT THEY CAN BECOME INDEPENDENT AND CNA MANAGE THEIR ALL EXPENSES BY THEIR OWN SELF.

ANOTHER ADVANTAGE IS THAT THROUGH THEY CAN ENHANCEN THEIR COMMUNICATION SKILL.

FOR EXAMPLE WHEN I WAS IN MY BACHELOR I WAS THE PART OF A SOCIETY WHOS NAME IS CBS CHARACTER BUILDIN SOCIETY .AND I WORK THEIR AS MEDIA SUPERVISOR FOR 3 YEAR .WHAT I GAIN FORM THAT I LEARN HOW TO MANAGE A TEAM .ANOTHER ONE IS HOW TO MANAGE SOCIAL MEDIA AND HOW TO COMMUNICATE WITH OTHER PEOPLE AND HOW TO MANAGE TENSEFULL SITUATIONS.

SO DOING WORK DURIING YOUR UNDERGRADUATIOIN CAN GIVE YOU A LOT OF ADVANTGAES WHICH I PREVISOULY MENTION.

FINALLY IF YOU HAVE COURSE LIKE SOCIAL SCIENCES YOU CAN WORK WITH DIFFERENT ORGANIZATION AND IF YOU HAVE COURSE LIKE ENGENERING SO YOU CAN WORK WITH DIFFERENT MANUFUCTURING COMPANIES AND INDUSTRIES. THIS CAN HELPS IN YOUR FUTURE WHEN YOU WILL GOING TO SERCH JOBS IN THE MARKETS.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response is relevant to the topic and gives a clear preference for work placements, supported by points about practical skills, independence, communication and future employment. The personal example about working as a media supervisor also helps illustrate what a placement might teach. However, the task asks whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and the essay discusses advantages almost exclusively: it does not identify or weigh any disadvantages, so the comparison required by the question is incomplete. Several points, such as meeting people in the field and managing expenses, are listed but not explained in enough detail to show how they support the overall judgement. Address both sides and make the weighing explicit, for example by explaining why the benefits are more significant than the costs or disruption.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas are presented in a broadly understandable order, and signposts such as “First of all,” “Moreover,” “Another advantage,” and “Finally” show an attempt to guide the reader. The personal example also gives the discussion a concrete point of reference. However, the response is largely a sequence of short points rather than a developed argument, and the repeated “another advantage” pattern makes the progression mechanical. Paragraphing is not used to separate the introduction, main discussion and conclusion, while the opening and closing do not clearly frame the essay’s position on both sides of the question. Group related ideas into paragraphs, use clearer links between claims and examples, and avoid abrupt transitions such as “Second one.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “work placement,” “academic skill,” “communication skill,” “organization,” and “industries,” so the reader can identify the main subject. However, the range is basic and several expressions are repeated or imprecise, such as “a lot of advantages” and “work like work placement.” Frequent spelling errors—including “exposure,” “knowledge,” “curricular,” and “engineering”—also make the writing less clear and reduce control of vocabulary. Some combinations are unnatural, for example “manage their all expenses by their own self.” Build a more precise range for discussing benefits and drawbacks, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More accurate phrases such as “apply academic knowledge in practice” would make the ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly relies on simple statements and repeated sentence patterns, with limited control of more complex structures. Errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction occur throughout and sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “the student … they should have to take part” has inconsistent number and an awkward modal construction, while “This can helps” uses an incorrect verb form. In “when you will going to serch jobs,” the tense and verb structure are also faulty. Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention, particularly where several ideas run together. Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses using “because,” “although” and “which”; proofread for subject–verb agreement and consistent tense.

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