Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In many countries all university of undergraduate courses including a period of time neither studying abroad nor doing a work placment. However, many collages nowadays giving time able to attening the leacture for their study proposed in advance. I partially advantage to outweight the disadvantage.

To commence, today education was significant parts of the youngsters lifestyle to understand better communication skills. Moreover, in all over the university including online learning platforms hence individuals acan easily attend the class. Furthermore, with facilitate of technology in many collagea now giving exam on online with advantagoues internet. Owing to, in abroad all university teachers also given information in advance that in which days adults should have to come. For instance, In Canada when i went for couple of family members and I had seen that students attended their undergraduate courses in time therefore it create positive development.

On the other hand, many institute at moment are not giving correct information for studying in the university rather than citizens are always prefer to work placment to earning more funds. In addition, it make climate changes in their area where they live due to senior citizens also trying to do work. Consequently, one majore disadvantage that students are went for study but after they do more work. For Example, this all cretiare were been capture the government and they have initiate the programe that the youngster got 24 hours for week to work but they focus on their subjects.

To conclude, government right now had taken a serious action on it nevertheless when any persone damage the rule it have to paid 500$ on it. As a result, it will rise gradually disparity between many countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You make an attempt to discuss both study abroad and work placements, and you state a position with “I partially advantage to outweight the disadvantage.” However, the position is difficult to interpret, and the essay does not clearly weigh the advantages against the disadvantages as the question requires. The first body paragraph focuses largely on online lectures and exams rather than explaining how an overseas study period or placement benefits undergraduates. The second mentions work and government rules, but the connection to the proposed compulsory period is unclear. The Canada example is also not explained enough to support a relevant point. To improve, state clearly which side outweighs the other, then develop relevant reasons and examples directly about the policy.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “On the other hand” and “To conclude” show an attempt to organise the discussion. However, ideas are not arranged in a consistently logical progression, and links between sentences are often unclear. For example, the move from online learning to teachers giving information about attendance, then to the Canada anecdote, does not build one clear argument. In the second body paragraph, climate change, work, government rules and students’ subjects are brought together without explaining their relationships. The conclusion introduces a fine and disparity between countries that have not been established earlier. Use one main point per paragraph and connect each supporting detail explicitly to it.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “communication skills,” “online learning platforms,” “work placement” and “disparity.” There is also some effort to use less common expressions, such as “positive development.” However, word choice, spelling and collocation errors are frequent enough to strain understanding: “collages” for “colleges,” “leacture” for “lecture,” “advantagoues” and “cretiare” make parts difficult to follow. Phrases such as “I partially advantage” and “giving time able” are not natural or clear in this context. Build a reliable set of accurate expressions for discussing benefits, drawbacks and policy, and check spelling and word forms. Prefer precise, familiar vocabulary over ambitious phrases whose meaning is uncertain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You try to form longer sentences and use subordinate links, for example “Owing to…” and “Consequently…,” as well as a range of time references. However, sentence structures are very limited in control, and frequent errors can distort meaning. Examples include “many collages nowadays giving,” which lacks a correctly formed verb, “it make climate changes,” with incorrect agreement, and “students are went,” which combines incompatible verb forms. Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries are also often inaccurate, as in “in all over the university” and “For instance, In Canada.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add one clause at a time. Check subject–verb agreement, tense, articles and punctuation during revision.

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