Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this 21st century,such topics are highly debated and discussed many of people consider that all university of undergraduate courses should such as a period of time spent studying out of country or doing work placement.In the following paragraph,I am going to discuss about with real example and my personal experience.

To commence with,there are many benefits of this statement because after completed education every student want to go abroad for their future career then they face large number of problems for their jobs.For instance, A university of student spend good amount of money his study but he cannot get work his country after completed study then than others foreign students.However every tutor can focuse on move to other country for earning.

Furthermore, second the most important benefit is that our country does not provide proper work to their students due to this reason student far to study and they fell stress.For example, last month the student of university of lahore commite the suiside because he felt stress about his job and he was needy person.therefore if young person will go to abroad for undergraduate courses where get work after completed their degree hence others country provide jobs and work to students during study like as UK,USA and GERMAN.

In addition, it has some drawbacks like as, all educational institute should complusory coursees from foreign countries our country cannot run in the progress feild so we face a some problems.

To sum up, I stringly believe that the merits are outweigh the demerits. governements should be complusory undergrudate study from out of states.Overall both sides ghave their own importantce, depending on the situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position in favour of the proposal, especially in the conclusion: “the merits are outweigh the demerits.” You also give reasons related to employment and student stress, with an example about a student in Lahore. However, the response only partially addresses the question. It does not clearly explain how a required period abroad or a work placement would produce the employment benefits claimed, and the discussion focuses mainly on studying abroad rather than considering both options. The disadvantage—that institutions may struggle to make overseas courses compulsory—is mentioned but not explained. Develop each point with a clear link to the proposal and explain why its benefits outweigh its costs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two benefit paragraphs, a drawback paragraph and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “For example” and “To sum up” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first benefit paragraph moves from future careers to difficulty finding work and then to tutors encouraging students to move abroad without making the connections clear. Some transitions, including “However” and “therefore,” do not accurately show the relationship between ideas. Improve cohesion by organising each paragraph around one main point, then explaining and illustrating it in a logical sequence; make references such as “this reason” and “their” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “work placement,” “future career,” “drawbacks” and “merits,” and you use some topic-specific terms such as “undergraduate courses.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make meaning harder to understand. Examples include “focuse on move,” “commite the suiside,” “complusory” and “progress feild.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “far to study” and “provide proper work to their students.” Build a more accurate set of collocations for education and employment, and check spelling and word forms carefully. Prefer clear, precise wording over attempts at complex expressions that do not convey the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using clauses introduced by “because,” “if” and “where,” but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently. For example, “after completed education every student want” has problems with the verb form and subject–verb agreement, while “if young person will go to abroad … where get work” does not form a clear conditional sentence. Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “A university of student spend” and the opening sentence, where several ideas run together. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation when editing.

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