Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays some individuals believe that undergraduate students should include a certain time in work place or studing abroad. I agree with this statement because work in company assist students enhance their skills also give them real life work experince.

One major reasons, why individuals consider that graduaters should work in industry. Students who have completed their courses should get real life experinces because learn new skills are neccessary, dut to skill they gets good jobs oportunity. Also morden companys reacuirting those worker who has more work expernces. Example of this is deploma. In recent report show that as compare to graduater diploma students have high possibility to hire because of their skill from work place.

However, there are negetive consequences of doing jobs in industrys by students. Students should focuse on study and get knowledges from college because educated people are more usefull for industry, educated individuals can produce more goos by use of technology.Also knowledgeable persion can figerout promble effertlessly and they also have new concept to grow the organostation. The clear example of this is apple company. In apple organisation human reasorce manager highr those people who have higher education because educated person have more concept to grow organisation.

In conculsion working in industry after graduation is benefical to them and i also agree with this because of skill enhancement and work experiance. however there are some negetive result as well because enchance skill and experince is not every thing industry. They should keep goin their education because of high knowledge make them huge assist for organistation and they can also produce more goods.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position in favour of including work experience, and you also acknowledge a possible disadvantage: students may need to focus on their studies. This gives the response a relevant basis for addressing the question. However, the task asks whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and your conclusion does not clearly compare them or explain why one side is stronger. The discussion also shifts from a placement during an undergraduate course to working after graduation, which weakens its relevance. The examples about diploma students and Apple are asserted rather than explained, so the main ideas remain limited and under-developed. Make the comparison explicit and support each point with a clear, relevant example tied to placements during university.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “One major reasons,” “However” and “In conculsion” show an attempt to guide the reader. The contrast between workplace experience and academic study is also a useful organising idea. However, progression is not always clear: the first body paragraph moves from skills to hiring prospects and then to an unclear diploma example, while the second repeats the value of education without directly weighing it against placements. Some links are mechanical, and references such as “this” in “The clear example of this” do not clearly identify the claim being illustrated. Organise each paragraph around one main point, explain the link between sentences, and make the conclusion follow from the comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to education and employment, including “work experience,” “skills,” “industry” and “organisation,” and you try to express ideas such as employability and productivity. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow, for example “work in company assist students,” “produce more goos” and “huge assist.” Frequent spelling errors—including “experince,” “negetive” and “organistation”—also reduce clarity and control. Some terms are used imprecisely: “diploma” is introduced without explaining how it supports the argument, and “work in industry” does not consistently refer to a placement during a degree. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common academic collocations, then use them consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both short statements and some attempts at longer structures, including a reason clause with “because” and a contrast introduced by “However.” This shows an effort to connect ideas rather than relying only on isolated simple sentences. However, the range remains limited, and errors are frequent in sentence construction, verb forms and agreement. For example, “work in company assist students” lacks an article and has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “those worker who has” has errors in both number and agreement. The sentence beginning “Students who have completed their courses should get real life experinces because learn new skills are neccessary” is difficult to parse because the clause structure is faulty. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and checking each sentence for a complete, clearly connected clause.

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