Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the majorty of all over the world university courses involve a time period invest on the education abroad.In the upcoming paragraph I will describe how its marities are outweight on demarities,also reasons and explain it with an true experience.

One of the main advantage is that,a student become self dependent.Moreover it os benificial for them who are facing the problem related to finance.Furtheremore to work on that field an individual want to built there future,it help them to gain knowledge regarding it.In addition a high course degre make to job on a standert or respected.

On the other hand,doing work regarding for placement is depend in which field an individual is working.In additionaly it also give a source of side income.Beside it doing a skilled placement support the future business.

One clear example is to illustrate it that,in modern era the students prefer to study abroad compare to in there birth country.In additionaly but there parents have not suppot them financial towards there study fees.So the student have not other option to do the sudy and do part time work to fulfied the universityies expenses.

In the conclusion:According to my prospector doing study is better option if an student want to do unique and high in future

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a general view that studying abroad is beneficial, and you mention independence, gaining knowledge, employment and income. However, the response only minimally answers whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages: the disadvantages are not clearly identified or compared with the benefits, and several points are difficult to interpret. The example about students working part-time because their parents cannot pay fees is relevant, but it does not clearly show why the overall advantages outweigh the drawbacks. The conclusion, “doing study is better option,” gives a position but does not summarise a developed argument. The response is also 42 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to explain and support the ideas. Develop both sides and make the comparison explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs for an introduction, supporting points, a contrasting section, an example and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise an intended structure. Basic linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “On the other hand” and “In addition” also signal relationships between ideas. However, progression is not consistently clear: the paragraph beginning “On the other hand” mainly lists possible benefits of placements rather than presenting a clear disadvantage, and the example is not explicitly connected to the claim that advantages outweigh disadvantages. Several transitions are awkward or repetitive, and the introduction promises reasons without clearly previewing them. Use each paragraph to develop one clear point, and connect examples back to the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to education and employment, including “self dependent,” “financial,” “placement,” “side income” and “future business.” These choices show an effort to discuss the topic rather than relying entirely on very basic words. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choice are frequent enough to strain understanding, as in “marities,” “outweight,” “demarities,” “standert” and “prospector.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, such as “a time period invest on the education abroad” and “do unique and high in future.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “study abroad,” “gain practical experience” and “career prospects” to express your ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional idea in “if an student want to do unique and high in future.” However, the range is very limited, and frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and verb forms make several sentences difficult to follow. For example, “a student become self dependent” lacks subject–verb agreement, while “it help them to gain knowledge” has the same problem. The opening sentence is also incomplete or unclear in its construction, and punctuation is often missing after full stops and commas. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although” and “if.”

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