Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad is best initiatives of international exposure for the students. It helps them to understand the international values and culture so they can get the international experience in thier career before garduating.

I believe, that while staying on first place it has too difficult to gain a interntational experinece. Advantages of such courses where international exposure can be very benficial for the students career. Introduction of such courses or doing work placement would be best choices for the students. If this gona happend then it would be a graet success of eduaction system.

Becouse more and more students will be attracted towards the education. I think by this the system generates the bydefault interest.

The courses where student can getting practicle oppurtunities for thier career alongside with international experience it would be a best courses. The problem would be resolved at the same time of employment. Only in undergraduation students can be able to understand the core value of education.

In conclusion, I would support such courses where students could get the international experience that education and course would be best among all. Moreover students get practical skills and knowledg in thier early phase of career.

It will be big achievement for the education system in future if they will succesfully introduced such courses. Automatically literacy ration will inreased. Best for students as well as the education system.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You take a broadly supportive position, saying that international exposure and practical skills would benefit students and the education system. However, the response only minimally addresses the comparison asked for: it does not explain what the disadvantages might be or weigh them against the advantages. Claims such as “literacy ration will inreased” are not explained or supported with a relevant example, and several points repeat the general idea that the courses would be beneficial rather than developing reasons. The response is also 227 words, 23 words below the 250-word minimum; 13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the answer, state your position clearly, discuss at least one disadvantage, and support each main point with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, so there is an attempt to organise the answer. The conclusion returns to the idea that international experience and practical skills are beneficial. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear line of reasoning: the second paragraph moves from difficulty gaining experience to course choices, educational success and student interest without explaining the links. The sentence beginning “Because more and more students…” is left as a fragment, and “Moreover” and “Automatically” do not make the relationships between claims clear. Several points are repeated in the conclusion. Build paragraphs around distinct reasons, use clear topic sentences, and connect each claim to its explanation.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “international exposure,” “practical opportunities,” “employment” and “core value of education.” These phrases show an effort to discuss education and career benefits. However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to follow: “staying on first place,” “bydefault interest” and “literacy ration” are unclear in context. Spelling errors such as “thier,” “experinece” and “succesfully” also occur repeatedly. Aim for precise, natural phrases and check spelling carefully. For example, explain whether you mean students’ interest in education, employment prospects, or literacy rates rather than relying on vague claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences, including “while staying on first place it has too difficult to gain a interntational experinece,” but control of sentence structure is limited and errors frequently affect clarity. Examples include “All university undergraduate courses … is best initiatives,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “The courses where student can getting practicle oppurtunities … it would be a best courses,” which has faulty clause structure and verb forms. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “a interntational experinece” and “a best courses.” The fragment “Becouse more and more students will be attracted towards the education” is not a complete sentence in this context. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking agreement, articles and verb forms.

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