Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

During the undergraduate courses every students should spent a certain amount of time on the workplace or foreign country.I think will be very effective for the students although there are some disadvantages.

Students should go to a foreign country during his courses.It will be most effective for him.First of all ,he will be able to study in foreign environment .He will be able to know about a foreign atmosphere and another country,s culture and heritage.HIs communication skill will be more stronger and he will gain a better certificate.secondly he will be able to earn money during his vacation time and he will contribute in our economy.And his family,s financial condition will grow.

Another advantage is that,If the student work in a fa mous company during his study time he will know about the company and its strategy.He gain some experience over many profession .In the work time the company pay him a smart amount of money.He will build up his communicationj skill and learn how to maintain a company.another advantage is his andurence will build up and he will become a great person.

Although there are some advantages work in a company or go to a foreign country.It has some disadvantages.First of all going to a foreign country is quit hard for a student.It requre a huge amount of money.There are some barriar in a foreign country such unknown language and different culture and haritage and food habits .And work in a is so hard during study .A student mai ntain his study and job .Sometimes student could not concentrate his study and he deppressed about his situation.

To sum up,Working a good company and going to a foreign country will more beneficial for a student but there are some disadvantages for a student .He could not enjoy his life and fell hasitate.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both the proposed benefits and drawbacks, and your position is clear: you believe overseas study or work placement would be beneficial overall. Relevant points include learning about another culture, gaining workplace experience, and facing costs or difficulty balancing work with study. However, some ideas are asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim that students will “contribute in our economy” and improve their family’s finances is not clearly connected to a placement, while “he will become a great person” is too general to support your argument. Develop fewer points with specific explanations or examples, and make the comparison between the benefits and disadvantages more explicit so the conclusion follows more convincingly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an overall structure, with an introduction, paragraphs presenting advantages and disadvantages, and a concluding summary. Sequencing phrases such as “First of all,” “secondly,” and “To sum up” help signal the stages of the argument. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and several ideas are joined without clear relationships, particularly in the advantages paragraphs where repeated “another advantage” introduces a list rather than a developed line of reasoning. Some references are also unclear: “he” shifts between students generally and an individual student, and “it” in the disadvantages paragraph does not have a precise referent. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each example to the main point, and vary linking methods while keeping references explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “foreign environment,” “culture and heritage,” “financial condition,” and “concentrate,” which helps communicate the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “a smart amount of money,” “over many profession,” and “maintain a company.” Spelling and word formation also affect clarity in items such as “andurence” and “barriar.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause to infer your meaning. Build a more precise vocabulary for education and employment, and check spelling and common word partnerships. For instance, describe gaining “practical experience” or receiving “a reasonable salary” rather than relying on vague expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a conditional idea beginning “If the student work in a famous company,” and you use some subordinate clauses to introduce reasons and contrast. However, control is inconsistent. Examples include “every students should spent,” “I think will be very effective,” and “He gain some experience,” which show problems with agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. Articles and sentence boundaries are also unreliable, as in “work in a is so hard during study” and the run-on sequence beginning “There are some barriers.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete sentence patterns, then proofread punctuation and clause boundaries.

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