Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In today's world, in abroad majority of many university for their undergraduate courses are including a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement. However, numerous are going forign for better graduate courses and beneficial lifestyle for future. I patially advantages as much as outweigh the disadvantages for studying in out of countries.

To commence, all university nowadays with assist of technology are giving the information in advance that from six day that on which day pupils has to come to study. Due to, many youngster went abroad for the study propose but after instead of study they are trying to work more and earn more funds. Moreover, studying in abroad is benefit that only two days in one week students has to went to study. For instance, In Canada many numerous today are passing the IELTS examination to go their dream country. As a result, in the abroad studying is the best way because they were giving more scholarship and more activites to take parts and entertinment with couple of friends in given time of periods.

On the other hand, individuals at the moments were facing harmful stituation in the outside of countries. Owing to, residents are going forign for study reasone but they are working over-limited therefore their governments have organished one rule that citizens have to focus their study rather than their governemts are giving 24 hour to work for only young people in one week.For example, In USA this rule had done since 2001 and till now many adolescents follow this platforms and students are studying more in the abroad.

To conclude, the benefit for studying abroad that better communication skills, good teacher and facilities also useful but individuals make drawback of using and try to work placement in different countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You attempt to answer whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and give a position in the introduction, but “I patially advantages as much as outweigh the disadvantages” does not make your view clear. The response also shifts between studying abroad, work placements, immigration rules and students working, so it does not consistently address the specific proposal that every undergraduate course should include a study-abroad period or placement. Some relevant points appear, such as scholarships, communication skills and the risk of students prioritising work, but they are not explained or supported clearly. The Canada and USA examples do not show how these points relate to the proposed requirement. State a direct position and develop a small number of relevant reasons on both sides.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “To commence” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion, so there is an attempt to organise the discussion. However, the progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow: the first moves from university information to students working, study schedules, IELTS, scholarships and entertainment without clear links. Connectors such as “Due to,” “Moreover,” and “As a result” are sometimes used where the relationship between ideas is unclear or the sentence is incomplete. The conclusion also introduces benefits without clearly resolving the comparison. Use one main idea per paragraph, explain it before adding an example, and make each linking phrase express the actual relationship between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “scholarship,” “communication skills,” “work placement” and “facilities,” and use phrases such as “On the other hand” to signal contrast. However, vocabulary is often inaccurate or repetitive, which makes several ideas hard to understand. Examples include “in abroad,” “forign,” “study propose,” “harmful stituation” and “make drawback.” Some expressions appear to mean something different from the intended point, such as “better graduate courses” and “24 hour to work.” Improve accuracy by learning common collocations for education and employment, and check spelling and word forms. More precise wording would help you explain the advantages and disadvantages without relying on vague or confusing phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You try to form longer sentences and use subordinate clauses, for example “Due to, many youngster went abroad … but after instead of study they are trying to work more.” However, sentence structures are frequently incomplete or difficult to control, and errors often obscure the intended meaning. In “many university … are including,” the subject and verb do not agree; “pupils has to come” also has an agreement error. Verb forms are inconsistent, as in “students has to went,” and articles and plurals are often missing or incorrect. Punctuation also creates run-on sentences, particularly in the second body paragraph. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clear clauses and check subject–verb agreement and tense.

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