Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

all university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement the people are going to abroad of their study or their family financial condition and doing a work placement because abroads study is to much better than of our and abroads work placement is to much good and better money place for worker peoples

in nowdays yung peoples going to abroad of their studies to their financial condition and they are going to abroad for earn to money of their family student are going to abroad becase they are think to abroads study are better of our country and going to abroad leave of their family and their country it has very pain full time the leving your family and country and going to abroad it is very pain full to student and a worker man but it is their responsibillity to because of they are going to abroad to complete of their responsibillity and than it is very it show compassion of their

in context the yung peole are going to abroad becuse of their studies and doing to work but when all yung people are going to abroad and who is in their country and whos develpoment of their country all university undergraduate courses should include a period spend studying aboroad or doing work placement it is feel sad for our country their people are going to abroad because of studies and for work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response touches on studying abroad and work placements, and it conveys a concern about students leaving their families and the effect on the home country. However, it does not clearly answer whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages: there is no consistent position or comparison, and the points about better education, earning money, and national development are not explained with relevant examples. The discussion is also difficult to follow in places, so the task is addressed only minimally. The response contains 218 words, which is 32 words below the required minimum; 26 words copied from the prompt were excluded from that count. To improve, state your view directly, develop both sides with specific reasons, and reach the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic paragraphing, with separate paragraphs referring to reasons for going abroad and possible effects on the home country. This gives the response a rudimentary structure. However, ideas do not progress clearly from one paragraph to the next, and several points are repeated, especially that young people go abroad for study or work. Linking expressions such as “in nowadays” and “in context” do not clearly show how ideas relate, while long strings of clauses make the argument hard to follow. Organise the essay around a clear sequence—for example, advantages, disadvantages, and your judgement—and use simple, accurate links such as “however” and “as a result.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The response uses a small set of relevant words, including “study,” “work placement,” “financial condition,” and “responsibility,” so the general subject can be recognised. However, vocabulary is basic and highly repetitive, and inaccurate word choices or spellings often make meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “abroads study,” “better money place,” and “pain full time”; these do not express the intended ideas naturally. There is also repeated use of “going to abroad” and “young people.” Build a more precise range for discussing education, employment, and social effects, and check spelling and common word combinations. This would make your points clearer without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining that students leave their families to fulfil responsibilities. This shows some effort to go beyond isolated simple statements. However, sentence boundaries and basic grammatical patterns are often inaccurate, which makes relationships between ideas unclear. In “the people are going to abroad of their study,” the sentence structure and preposition pattern are not controlled; “they are think” also has an incorrect verb form. Articles, agreement, and punctuation are inconsistent, and several sentences run together without clear stops. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses using “because,” “although,” or “while.”

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.