Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Every university have a undergraduate courses and developed their skills .Now a days students are struggling to get a jobs lack of spent time on work placement.

In my opinion ,I will strongly tell it is best advantage to doing a worked on placements.For ever student offer their time on research about the companies.

To begin with , it shows that the major role while working on placements. to illustrate lessor able to developed thier own carier by choose their courses after the undergraduated .however the first thing is ability for their studies during entry graduate circulum following this to selected there goal where have to go or what have to do .

Learners was a appropirate path to spend on the time in roles . to instance i really faced many problems to get a job or interships because of less experience and research . on other hand the institution never give any time on placement . during the graduate i was completed the subject move to the next stage without knowning me . once we get into part who's never escape d. however making dicision is important role.

to illustrate the disadvantage causes the impact of your carrier .university have give some time on their research . and known their capability on courses.

in conclusion , to would like say that is major part to encourage this type of system in the university . st

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You express a preference for including placements, and your personal experience of struggling to find work without experience is relevant to the topic. However, the response only minimally answers whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages: the position is not clearly explained, and the disadvantages are mentioned without a specific example or comparison. Several points, such as students researching companies and choosing a career, are difficult to interpret or develop. The conclusion supports the system but does not summarise why its benefits are greater than its drawbacks. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum, leaving less space to explain and support your ideas. Develop one or two clear reasons and directly weigh them against a disadvantage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “To begin with,” “on other hand” and “in conclusion” signal stages in the discussion. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough for the reader to follow a clear line of reasoning. For example, the paragraph beginning “Learners was a appropirate path” moves from placements to personal job difficulties and then to an unclear point about “part who's never escape d.” Connections between sentences are often missing or unclear, and the contrast between advantages and disadvantages is not developed in separate, purposeful sections. Plan a simple sequence—position, benefits, drawbacks, comparison—and make each paragraph focus on one main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “work placement,” “experience,” “interships,” “capability” and “career,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and several word choices or forms make meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “lessor able,” “graduate circulum,” “worked on placements” and “making dicision.” Spelling errors such as “thier,” “carier” and “knowing” (written as “knowning”) also reduce accuracy. Some phrases appear to be direct or incomplete translations rather than natural English collocations. Build a reliable set of expressions for this topic, such as “gain practical experience,” “develop professional skills” and “improve employment prospects,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, including a clause beginning “because of less experience and research,” but control of sentence structure is limited. Errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries occur frequently and sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For instance, “Every university have a undergraduate courses” has agreement and article problems, while “Learners was a appropirate path” uses an incorrect verb form and an unclear structure. Several sentences begin with lowercase letters or are joined with punctuation that does not show their relationship, as in “placements. to illustrate.” Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses with clear subjects and verbs. Proofread for agreement, articles and punctuation.

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