Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowdays,Universities provide all kind of facilites to pupils for the better education and better experience as per the course and provide material for the studies. However some universities provide internship opportunities for pupils to get a relevant experiance of the field of corporate sector and provide work placements to get a good employement so . I would like to share my opninion about these universities should provide intenrships and study aborad programs to their students. so it can give them better opportunities about as per their course.

Firstly, Universities who takes the huge amount of fees from students. Every universities should provide all the things ad internships opportunities to the pupils and also provide better education platforms for thr studeents also faculties should provide tech students hackathons and several projects so they can get a better experiance about their field and explore the interest. For example : Gls university which is located in ahmedabad , Gujarat who provides student international placements and colleges for master's abroad and doing end to end process. Apart from that they also gives univerisites options to student as per their need

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response is relevant to the topic and gives a broadly supportive view of internships and overseas study, with a specific example in the reference to GLS University. However, it does not clearly answer whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages: no disadvantages are discussed, and the position is only implied rather than stated and maintained. The ideas about fees, placements, projects and international opportunities are introduced but not explained enough to show how they benefit all undergraduates or what drawbacks might arise. The response is also 64 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to develop the argument. State your position directly, address both sides, and support each main point with explanation or an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and moving to a paragraph introduced by “Firstly.” The example of GLS University also gives the reader a concrete point to follow. However, the response has no clear overall progression: it ends abruptly, and the relationship between university fees, internships, hackathons and studying abroad is not made explicit. Linking words such as “However,” “Firstly” and “Apart from that” are used, but they do not consistently clarify how ideas connect. Some sentences are difficult to follow because several points are joined together. Use separate paragraphs for your position, advantages and disadvantages, and conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one central idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “internship opportunities,” “work placements,” “corporate sector” and “international placements,” so the reader can identify the subject being discussed. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, such as “facilites,” “experiance,” “employement” and “aborad.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, including “better opportunities about as per their course” and “provide all the things.” Aim for accurate spelling and more specific academic phrasing. For example, describe the opportunities students gain, rather than repeating general terms such as “better” and “things.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to understand. For example, “Universities who takes the huge amount of fees from students” is a sentence fragment, while “Every universities should provide” has a subject–verb and number agreement problem. The opening sentence also joins several ideas without clear sentence boundaries, and the final sentence is incomplete. Punctuation is unreliable, including spaces before full stops and inconsistent capitalisation after sentence breaks. Practise writing complete sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check agreement, articles and punctuation before finishing.

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