Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement.

Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Every undergraduate programme should include a period of duration spent education foreign or work consultant.I believe that this thing is more beneficial.

One of the major advantage is that, students studying and job in abrod at that time they do not have clearity of their life. Moreover, during that learing period also they lived in that individual place. Which means they are accounted for that time for any process like permenant residency. It has been really helpfull for their long journey in their next plan and future decision. Furthermore,their spending time is also one kind of time to spend in that nation which are more valuable.

In additionally, complition of study provide some post study work visa which are helpfull for student to do work in same country. But some time they are not fullfill criteria of residency process. For example, individual completed their study after that they needed prescribe years for their further processes but some student not full fill that not only this but also that government not count their studytime which was biggest drawback fore every student who need to citizenship indifferent country. Although, they people are survive and leave compare to require time duration and make strong that file. which was not good for everyone.

In conclusion, undergraduates course should include a period of time spent studing abroad or doing a work placement. Nevertheless, people do not take their advantages and after that they construct a different things. Consequently, student raise and country grow for that step. which are good for every students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a position in the opening—“I believe that this thing is more beneficial”—and return to the idea that courses should include overseas study or work in the conclusion. However, the response does not clearly compare the advantages and disadvantages of the proposed requirement. Most of the discussion concerns residency and citizenship processes, rather than the educational or employment benefits of studying abroad or doing a placement. The disadvantage is also difficult to identify: the paragraph describes students failing to meet residency criteria, but does not explain how this is a disadvantage of making overseas study or work placements compulsory. Develop relevant points on both sides, explain how they relate to the requirement, and support them with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so there is an attempt to organise the answer into stages. Some linking expressions, including “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” “For example” and “In conclusion,” signal relationships between ideas. However, the progression within the body paragraphs is difficult to follow: the first moves from uncertainty about life to residency and future plans, while the second shifts between post-study visas, citizenship rules and students’ circumstances. Several references, such as “that thing,” “that time” and “they people,” do not make clear who or what is meant. Build each paragraph around one main point, explain it in a logical sequence, and use linking words only where the relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary connected with education, employment and migration, including “undergraduate programme,” “post study work visa” and “permanent residency.” This gives the response some relevant topic language. However, basic vocabulary is often inaccurate or repetitive, and several choices make the meaning hard to understand: “work consultant,” “clearity of their life,” “construct a different things” and “student raise and country grow.” Spelling errors such as “abrod,” “learing” and “helpfull” also reduce clarity. Choose familiar words that express your intended point precisely, and check spelling and common word combinations. For example, distinguish a “work placement” from a “consultant,” and use “career plans” rather than the unclear phrase “clearity of their life.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a conditional-style example beginning “For example, individual completed their study…” and a contrast introduced by “Although.” However, sentence structures are frequently faulty, and errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Examples include “One of the major advantage is that, students studying and job…” and “some post study work visa which are helpfull,” where agreement and sentence construction are not controlled. There are also incomplete or poorly joined sentences, such as “Which means they are accounted for that time” and “Although, they people are survive…”. Practise forming a clear subject–verb–object sentence first, then add one supporting clause. Check agreement, articles, verb forms and punctuation when combining ideas.

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