Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates the results of a survey of library users at a university. Catagories of library users in the chart are chown clearly.

Academic staff can use 7% library and the Distance learning (all cources) can use only 8% while on the other hand Part-time postgraduate can use 16% and full time postgrade can use 25% library. The students that are full time undergraduate they can use 44% library.

Library user satisifaction is very crusical for the library owners.When the library is opened 65% peoples are satisfied and 35% are fairly satisfied. The students that can give help from staff is 95% and the students that doe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the topic and report the user-category figures accurately, including the largest group, full-time undergraduates at 44%, and the smallest, academic staff at 7%. However, the response addresses the satisfaction table only briefly: it mentions opening hours and staff helpfulness but stops before reporting the remaining results, so the main comparisons and an overall summary are missing. The final sentence is incomplete, which further limits the information conveyed. The response contains 97 words, below the required 150; 11 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To improve, include a clear overview of the strongest and weakest satisfaction results, compare the categories, and complete the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response moves from the user categories to satisfaction, so there is a basic sense of topic order, and phrases such as “on the other hand” attempt to connect comparisons. However, the ideas are not developed into a clear report structure: there is no distinct overview, and the satisfaction section ends abruptly at “the students that doe”. Some links are also awkward or unclear, such as “The students that can give help from staff,” which makes it difficult to follow the intended point. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, and use linking expressions to show meaningful comparisons rather than simply joining statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “Academic staff,” “Distance learning,” “Part-time postgraduate,” and “fairly satisfied,” which helps identify the chart categories. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors reduce accuracy, including “Catagories,” “chown,” “cources,” “satisifaction,” and “crusical.” Some phrases are also unnatural for describing survey data: “can use 7% library” and “65% peoples are satisfied” do not express the figures clearly. Use precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “respondents were satisfied.” Careful proofreading of spelling and collocations would make the information easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example with “while on the other hand,” but most sentence patterns are simple and several constructions are faulty. In “Academic staff can use 7% library,” the percentage is not grammatically linked to the group; a structure such as “Academic staff accounted for 7% of users” would be clearer. “When the library is opened 65% peoples are satisfied” has an awkward clause and incorrect noun construction, while “The students that can give help from staff” does not form a complete, clear sentence. The final sentence is unfinished. Practise accurate past-tense reporting structures and complete sentences, then vary them with controlled comparisons.

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