Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In this chart shows the result of library uses in different satisfaction parts in university and make categories in this chart to make a report of people which uses a lot library at and how much is it satisfied
In library distributed in 5 section which people used library in academic staff the percentage 7% uses the library and then it rise a few in distance learning all courses which is very helpful for the student, and the chart percentage gradually increase in part-time postgraduate students uses library and 25% full-time postgraduate students uses the library and the half of percentage full-time undergraduate students uses the library which is 44%
and facing some problems in library uses some is satisfied and some is not fairy satisfied and some is not satisfied of uses library in opening hours 65 % is satisfied with opening hours 35% is fairy satisfied 35 percent the helpfulness satisfied with library uses it will be 95 percentage and the availability satisfied 50 % and 20 is not and 35 is ok with it and arability of journals and Wifi is ALMOST SAME SATISFACTION WHICH IS 50% 20 IS NOT SATISFIED AND 33 IIS FAIRY SATISFIED
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or a logical structure. While it mentions several categories and percentages, the information is presented in a fragmented manner, making it difficult to follow. The report lacks a clear distinction between the two parts of the data (user categories vs. satisfaction levels). Furthermore, the interpretation of the data is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that 'the chart percentage gradually increase' without clear context. To improve, you should group related data points together and provide a clear summary of the main trends rather than listing figures in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. There is no clear introduction, body, or conclusion. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused, such as the repetitive use of 'and' to connect unrelated ideas. Paragraphing is absent or ineffective, as the text is essentially a series of run-on sentences. The progression of ideas is unclear, and the reader struggles to identify the relationship between the different data points presented. To improve, focus on using transition words like 'however', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' to link ideas and organize your report into distinct, logical paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'uses', 'satisfied', and 'percentage'. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'different satisfaction parts' and 'fairy satisfied' (likely meant 'fairly'). The lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language limits the ability to convey the data accurately. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary, such as 'proportion', 'majority', 'fluctuate', or 'level of satisfaction', and ensure that terms are used in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are many run-on sentences, missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'In this chart shows' instead of 'This chart shows'). Punctuation is largely ignored, with a lack of full stops or commas to separate thoughts. The sentence structures are predominantly simple and often grammatically incomplete. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using punctuation to separate distinct ideas. Reducing the number of run-on sentences will significantly improve the clarity of your writing.
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