Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie chart shows the results of a survey of library user at a university. there are total five categories namely : academic staff, distance learning , full time postgraduate, full time undergraduate, part time postgraduate The academic staff is around 7% whereas distance learning is around 8% whereas part time post graduate 16% meanwhile full time post graduate is 25% whereas full time undergraduate is around 44% The given pie chart shows that the full time undergraduates has the highest count.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the task achievement. While you have identified the main categories and provided the corresponding percentages, the response lacks a clear overview or a meaningful comparison of the data. The information is presented as a list of facts rather than an analytical summary. To improve, you must ensure you meet the word count, provide a clear introductory statement, and group the data to highlight trends or significant differences between the user groups, rather than simply listing each percentage individually.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks paragraphing and logical structure. It is written as a single, disjointed block of text. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on the word 'whereas' to connect clauses. There is no clear progression of ideas; the information is simply stated one after another without any attempt to group related data points or create a flow. To improve, you should organize your response into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, using a wider variety of linking words such as 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'by comparison.'

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. You use the same phrasing ('is around') for almost every data point, which limits the range of your expression. There is no attempt to use more sophisticated vocabulary to describe trends or proportions. For example, instead of repeating 'is around,' you could use terms like 'accounted for,' 'constituted,' or 'represented.' The spelling of 'post graduate' is inconsistent, and the overall lexical range is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision or academic style.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the short text. Punctuation is poor, with missing full stops and incorrect capitalization (e.g., 'there are total five'). There is a lack of subject-verb agreement, such as 'full time undergraduates has,' where the plural subject requires a plural verb. The sentence structures are very simple and lack the complexity expected at this level. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and pay closer attention to punctuation and capitalization rules.

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