Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In this summary we are going to summerize the categories of different liberary users and will do a comparison between them.
firstly the main and around less then half of the liberary users are undergraduated Secondly the quata of libary users are full time post graduate. Thirdly the half of the quater of users are Part time graduates. lastly the users of distance learning and academic staff are mostly the same.
The users are satifisfied with the liberary opening hours. It seems to be a helpful staff because noone is unsatisfied with it but as we see the avaibality of books just the ten percent of people are not satisfied.
At the end the availability of gen journals and reliability of wi-fi we can see most of the people are not satisfied with that services.
Over all the users are satisfieel with the services just excluding wi-fi and Avaliability of journals.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to summarise the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the key features. The description of the user categories is imprecise (e.g., 'half of the quater'), and the data interpretation is inconsistent. The response lacks a clear structure for comparing the two distinct datasets (the chart and the table). Crucially, the information provided is often inaccurate when compared to typical survey data representations, and the lack of specific figures makes the summary vague. To improve, you must clearly identify the highest and lowest values and use precise data points to support your observations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into short, disjointed paragraphs. While there is an attempt to use sequencing words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'lastly', these are used mechanically and do not effectively link the ideas. The progression of information is somewhat confusing, as the transition between the user categories and the satisfaction levels is abrupt. The referencing is also weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logic of the comparison. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'liberary', 'undergraduated', 'quata', 'satifisfied', and 'avaibality'. The range of words used is insufficient to convey the information with precision. You rely on basic descriptors like 'helpful' or 'not satisfied' rather than using more academic terminology appropriate for a report. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include synonyms and more precise terms for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'majority', 'minority', and 'significant', while also focusing on accurate spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the users of distance learning and academic staff are mostly the same'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence forms, which are necessary for higher-level writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of complex sentences to link ideas more effectively.
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